You have the power and profundity that a poet needs to really convey his message! This is divine. I think I'll need to read it again to really determine whether the craft is there, as a couple of times it seemed you made an awkward line break or lack thereof, due to the adherence to the three-lined stanzas (which is a bit ironic, no? on the other hand the reason why I say I'm still debating the craft is one of the line breaks does break the irony by not adhering to the rules.....which irony is stronger, though? hmmmm).
On another note: better to put the poem in the body of the post, as not many would look up to read the small writing in the description. Most of them would see no writing and leave. You can still keep the image as is, as it has its cool aspects, but have the poem as well on the post itself so those know that there is something there.
But well done on the poem itself! Much enjoyed! (Give my comments some consideration and you just might get the craft down on it).
Posted 5 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
5 Years Ago
I appreciate it.
I'm more of a stream of consciousness writer. I know what you're talking ab.. read moreI appreciate it.
I'm more of a stream of consciousness writer. I know what you're talking about though. I do that on purpose to convey multiple meanings and avenues.
Glad you enjoyed it.
You have the power and profundity that a poet needs to really convey his message! This is divine. I think I'll need to read it again to really determine whether the craft is there, as a couple of times it seemed you made an awkward line break or lack thereof, due to the adherence to the three-lined stanzas (which is a bit ironic, no? on the other hand the reason why I say I'm still debating the craft is one of the line breaks does break the irony by not adhering to the rules.....which irony is stronger, though? hmmmm).
On another note: better to put the poem in the body of the post, as not many would look up to read the small writing in the description. Most of them would see no writing and leave. You can still keep the image as is, as it has its cool aspects, but have the poem as well on the post itself so those know that there is something there.
But well done on the poem itself! Much enjoyed! (Give my comments some consideration and you just might get the craft down on it).
Posted 5 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
5 Years Ago
I appreciate it.
I'm more of a stream of consciousness writer. I know what you're talking ab.. read moreI appreciate it.
I'm more of a stream of consciousness writer. I know what you're talking about though. I do that on purpose to convey multiple meanings and avenues.
Glad you enjoyed it.
I have been writing in all different forms since I was ten years of age. I enrolled in a military school that focused hardcore on broadcast journalism. I aggressively studied and performed newscasting.. more..