I.
I am in the kitchen
stuffing old tomatoes
down the drain
knowing you will come in soon
and tell me to stop being ridiculous.
That you can never, ever really
get rid of the things
you are trying to get rid of.
II.
Today, my breakfast consists
of apologies
and a self help guide
for this body.
Apparently,
the shaking will stop
eventually.
III.
Sometimes when it rains,
I sit on my window sill
with my arms
bungling in the summer sky’s funeral,
hunting,
Well. Hands down my favorite part is the middle one.
The first line, 'Today my breakfast consists of apologies' is potent. Both because you used the word 'Today', which implies that you so often eat, or are fed things that are not as positive as you'd like, and obviously the whole concept of eating apologies.
Also, ''Apperently' before the shaking will stop is again a powerful way to put it. It's an almost cynical way to treat mistrust between you, and the misconception that things get better by themselves. You don't go as far as to directly dispute it, but the question marks left all around are even more impressive.
Good job.
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
Thank you for this! These words really mean a lot to me.
Well. Hands down my favorite part is the middle one.
The first line, 'Today my breakfast consists of apologies' is potent. Both because you used the word 'Today', which implies that you so often eat, or are fed things that are not as positive as you'd like, and obviously the whole concept of eating apologies.
Also, ''Apperently' before the shaking will stop is again a powerful way to put it. It's an almost cynical way to treat mistrust between you, and the misconception that things get better by themselves. You don't go as far as to directly dispute it, but the question marks left all around are even more impressive.
Good job.
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Thank you for this! These words really mean a lot to me.
Your poems are so mysterious. Very artistic. They paint a picture that feels rather open for interpretation, and draws attention away from the canvas in which the paintings are painted on. Great work, anne.
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
I really appreciate your words. Thank you so much!