To A Stranger

I was at the station and it was raining. Again him and I were boarding the same train.

Break the ice now!

Because hope is fading away fast.

Let us create infinity,

While these drops of moments last.

Soon we will be strangers again…

Let the ice melt, I beg

Ride is coming to an end.

Let’s feel that beautiful kind of pain.

Let it rain

Oh let it rain.

Author's Note

Any feedback is welcome. I want to improve. :)

Reviews

[emipoemi]

This is beautiful. I love the flow and the narrative, and the ending caps it off with a nice punch. The only things that I would suggest need tweaking are "away" (in Line 2), take it out, for it doesn't need to be there (the musicality will flow better without it); and "let the ice melt I beg", remove it. It's unnecessary reiteration of the first line, and it just mars the flow of the poem and its integrity. Take it out. What you have left is an absolute gem! Well done!

[Isha C.]

Thank you very much for your input! It means a lot. It really does.

[emipoemi]

You're very welcome. My pleasure.