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health for vision

i looked out across the sea from the fishermans deck,

realizing that the sea is mighty,

i  surely have a place within it,

a elderly caucasian couple set beside me smoking cigarettes,

i thought to myself ''they wont have much longer to live'',

at times i feel so lonely in this world wear i live,

the majority of the time im living in my mind with positive visions that i wish exist on this land,

the sun is extremly warm,

or maybe its the sweater im wearing,

its summer of course,

 but this morning i needed it,

the sky is a rich blue today,

and everyone is filled with lots of energy wich i didnt expect,

the sailors are washing theyr boats from urliers fish catch,

hear i am standing alone as always again,

but some how i find my life much easier,

being i dont have to deal with peoples bullshit,

someday i hope to find great people who understand me as i understand them within,

but for now,

''it is what it is''.

Reviews

[Trigorin]

Check your spelling and grammar. Your poem is fairly decent but it's those niggling little errors which distract the reader from the point. In addition, a great deal of your lines are awkward and stilted - I'd go back and look over this whole piece and make sure you're saying what you want to say as succinctly and as vividly as possible.