Blue Autumn

Autumn leaves,

a whisper of snow,

the warmth from the fire

as the red embers glow .

 

Night fall comes

in shades of gray and black

not a star shining

as the clouds push them back

 

I reminess

as the day goes by

our love reminds me

of the colors of the sky

 

Gray and black

not a star in sight

i knew our love was over

this very night ...

Reviews

[Wild Rose]

Loved it until the last verse
But then that's life

[wordman]

but isn`t that the way life goes,,thank`s

[Wild Rose]

Yes
I just read you first verse again fire with red embers
Think it was Linton (Yorks dales) YHA where they used to have a huge log fire in the wide old fireplace on winters nights

[wordman]

you can get it on google images

[SCRIBBLER]

great write. short, sweet and simple but yet conveys a very deep message.

[wordman]

thank you mr scribbler,good to see you

[MCS]

well done but so very sad...

[wordman]

thank you for the visit

[angel]

Awww, that's sad; but as long as you're still alive, there's hope that love can come again.
As Gerry and the Pacemakers sang, "Don't forget that love's a game, and it can always come again, so don't let the sun catch you crying..."
Oh, and I read in your profile that you've been here five years and still can't write. Better update, honey, because I don't think that's true, at least anymore.

[wordman]

you are sweet,fire one up for me
and i know the songs well,we have a am station that features dick clark on week ends with his show rock,,roll and remember

[Silmara McGarry]

How beautiful...Short...with sweet rhymes...just the way I liked! Well done!!! :-)

[wordman]

thank you for reading

[Beccy]

Doesn't it almost always. :))

[wordman]

almost,yeah ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,

[Beccy]

I was lulled by the first three verses, then got to the fourth and paused, thinking, such a shame.

This is a quite beautifully built poem, that leads the reader on so very cleverly to the end and the dashing of hope.

Really liked this.

Beccy.

[wordman]

lol,it must have just worked out that way
thank you for reading

[LKBillips]

Tragic and wistful...makes me feel melancholy and think of my own past. Very vivid and mesmerizing. Nice one!

[wordman]

thank you for reading

[θεά]

Very beautiful, very nostalgic. Whether you loved and lost, love for the moment fills you with emotions- whether or not it is returned or genuine at all from the other is not in your control. A minor nit-pick- spelling of reminisce is grossly misspelled. Kindly correct it.

Otherwise a sublime write!

Best,
M.

[wordman]

thank you for the visit,

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Ive always wondered why autumn and winter often bring loss in relationships but i guess it is just a season like everything else. Love the moody crispness!

[wordman]

thank you for the visit