Moon Beams

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Catching moon beams,

walking on crystal air,

gliding over the ocean,

full of love,without a care.

 

Sliding on a rainbow,

jumping on to a star,

fire racing across the water,

as i drag moon beams on the way.

 

Moon beams glowing,

in her eyes,

as i watch,

my beautiful venus rise.

 

The smile on her face,

lights up the skies,

as she walks on my moon beams,

i get lost in her eyes...

Reviews

[Glen's not so clean sla..]

A very very sensual read thank-you, Ron. I must say I enjoyed meself thoroughly mate.

[wordman]

thank you for the visit

[Effie]

Beautiful! Sweetly romantic. Love it

[wordman]

thank you effie

[Anise]

A lovely and delicate poem. With a light floating feel to it.
I did wonder at the second paragraph where you did not rhyme it. star/way
I wonder if you were editing and missed that, i have done that.
May I suggest, respectfully, perhaps changing the line "as i drag moon beams on the way" to as "i drag moonbeams from afar". Just my thought, all in all I found it very romantic.

[wordman]

i am just ignorant,lol thank you

[Anise]

You're welcome, it happens. :)

[Ayvid N]

Moonbeams light up my heart...utterly romantic and beautiful...Appreciated so much!

[wordman]

was glad to light up your heart,,thank you

[Jennifer]

Captivating, beautiful...completely outstanding! 💕

[wordman]

u r to kind,,thank you

[Jennifer]

You are most welcome! ☺

[SleeplessVolcano]

Wow, this was so soothing. I want the day to finish now so that I can have a moonlit walk :)

[wordman]

thank you for the visit

[θεά]

Feels like love and fulfilment, doesn't it? Very nice and moonlit romance is the ultimate.

[wordman]

thank you for the visit

[Karmee]

Awwwh this is such a sweet wonderful write. Poetic

[wordman]

thank you for the visit

[Karmee]

not a problem

[User]

Very whimsical. Thanks for sharing, this really is beautiful..

[wordman]

thank you for reading

[Zoya]

Beautiful and ethereal as ever. Lovely work!

[wordman]

thank you zoe

[Zoya]

You're welcome