Moon Beams

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Catching moon beams,

walking on crystal air,

gliding over the ocean,

full of love,without a care.

 

Sliding on a rainbow,

jumping on to a star,

fire racing across the water,

as i drag moon beams on the way.

 

Moon beams glowing,

in her eyes,

as i watch,

my beautiful venus rise.

 

The smile on her face,

lights up the skies,

as she walks on my moon beams,

i get lost in her eyes...

Reviews

[Neville]

losing oneself in another's eyes... ah' the perfect place to get lost.... loads and loads of lovely sentiments threaded from one end of this love poem to the other......... neville

[wordman]

thank you for the visit

[Neville]

my pleasure

[Kumarmani Mahakul]

Walking on crystal air amazes mind entirely. Sliding on a rainbow and jumping on a star motivate mind and interest. Moon beam ever gives beauty and calmness. Smile blooms in face in joy. An excellent poem is beautifully penned.

[wordman]

you are kind,,thank you

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You have very precise work with your words. Poem keeping unity and you craving mood of delight in love. I can feel like every your word like prayers for all lovers. I hope you enjoying losting in her eyes.




P.S. I was come to see your poems. Cause certain attacking of your person by notorious anti poet. I can see here is more involve jealousy then seeking for truth. I hope you doing okay.

[wordman]

thank you for the visit,lol that idiot has been trying to get me to leave for years,i take up for the people that he trolls..makes him mad

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I am here about 5 years. And I never meet him before. He start atack me and insult me last year. Like down syndrom writing, etc. I think he is very unhappy man . But never lest your writing is great and you full deserve all reviews what you get.

[wordman]

his name then was t k little ,he has over 135 fake names

[...]

Yes so many names for one person. How he can do that?

[wordman]

it`s harder now,he just changes names on his account

[Onlyme]

This is so magically sweet and so romantic.

[wordman]

thank you for the visit dee

[Onlyme]

My pleasure, your a true poet wordman.😊

[wordman]

lol,i wish i were ,but you on the other hand probably are

[Onlyme]

Your modest and a very decent gentleman with a heart of gold.

[wordman]

thank you dee

[Onlyme]

No need to thank me, just being honest and true about you from what I see and read and feel in your writings.

[wordman]

a hopeless romantic i guess

[Onlyme]

Nothing wrong with that at all. As I said your a good man and shows.

[wordman]

thank you very much

[Just Kim]

This is ever so lovely, Very nicely written and expressed emotions. sweet write

[wordman]

thank you.appreciate the review

[Ranger Kessel]

I loved the classic rhyming scheme and felt the intensity of this piece it was a nice write. I am glad I stopped by. Thanks for posting this.

[wordman]

thanks for reading

[Madeira]

Wonderful poem, loved it!

[wordman]

thank you for the visit

[Jacob Clifford]

Simply captivating! I love all the imagery and sensory detail here. I find myself lost in thought after reading this romantic and lovely poem.

[wordman]

thank you for the visit

[Rob Edwards]

I read your profile's about me section, and I have to ask - what do you mean, you can't write? This is a fine poem full of great imagery.

The only suggestion I have is in the second stanza, where your rhyme scheme is off. In every other stanza you rhyme the 2nd and 4th lines and you don't do this here with the words 'star' and 'way'. Is that on purpose? It just threw me off a bit.

Other than that little thing, I loved it. Keep writing!!!!

[wordman]

i solely write free style,most of my poems do rhyme though,,,thank you