Thanks for sharing your spiritual side. I think many people can identify wih this piece. We all have those times when we feel disconnected and it is a lonely, barren place to be. Your words describe it very well. Nice work! I did want to mention in the second stanza, correction in the last line-should be "call upon", not "call up on."
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
thank you for the visit,and i thought i fixed that type o,guess i didn`t,lol
Your submission is now read in the http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/Nature%2C-Auroras%2C-Lights%2C-Trees%2C-Water%2C-Outdoors-Contest/54059/ please stay tuned for the winning poems. Thank you for your entry. I loved the poem! He will never forsake you! He loves us.. I know he has shed numerous tears over me too.
Great song and sad/lonely poetry. Hardest day is when we learn. We are not needed and forgotten. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote
go to you tube and right click the song you like and click on embeded code and place it on your poem.. read morego to you tube and right click the song you like and click on embeded code and place it on your poem where you want it
This is a beautiful piece .. I am adding this to my library . I can remember not long ago feeling like this .. it is Sins that seperate us from him .... And, why often times he closes his ears ... But, a repentent heart and sincere humbling obedient surrendering to his will prayer he will always hear .. the hardest part I find in laying down any sin that seperates anyone from God is not an easy journey for ones self to allow without having pride because of being comfortable within that sin or (sins) ... But, his grace and mercy endures forever even until the end ... He is the same always instant in season and out of season ... h doesnt change and neither does his goodness ... It's there ... We just have to seek after his wisdom and find truth in his words and allow them to change us ... no matter how difficult that is to admit ... It's worth it to Surrender all not just some things ... But, Everything ... God is God On The Mountain , He's God in The Valley , He's God over the seas ... And he's God over you & me ... His holiness doesn't change ... we do .
I love this longing for the Lord piece ....
It shows a soul thirsty and to me is beautiful and
admirable too =)
Thanks for sharing ...
And, whether this is a reality piece or someone who just inspired you by viewing their journey from being seperated from God...
Thank you for sharing ...
I hope to have soem read requests from you in the future :)
L
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
i appreciate your honesty and you are right,never send out rr`s and you have to be friends to send a.. read morei appreciate your honesty and you are right,never send out rr`s and you have to be friends to send a rr
Good grief. I felt this like a knife to my soul. I HAVE BEEN THERE! Some days I feel like I am there. I just have no objective words to offer on the technical aspects of this piece. I'm too busy trying to catch my breath. So very deep and so very, very vulnerable. Thank you for sharing.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
thank you for stopping by,i have my religious side,lol
Oh dear. This made me feel hurt deep inside. Knowing that you are a man and considering (maybe) this is a real emotion you got there. So real and good. Keep writing. :)
just ask, golden glove boxer years ago,us army veteran ,a contractor is how i make my living,
i am an amateur writer.. been here since june of 2013,couldn`t write then,still can`t.but who cares
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