Thanks for sharing your spiritual side. I think many people can identify wih this piece. We all have those times when we feel disconnected and it is a lonely, barren place to be. Your words describe it very well. Nice work! I did want to mention in the second stanza, correction in the last line-should be "call upon", not "call up on."
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
thank you for the visit,and i thought i fixed that type o,guess i didn`t,lol
I actually really enjoyed you poems, loneliness is something that is easy to hide and I think you wrote the poem with a such a passion for God, we all get lost at times, there are many questions we will never know about God but what we do know is he loves us and even when there is silence he is there watching over us.
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
thank you for the visit,and we could debate this forever
i look forward to it,and you haven't blocked me yet,lol,you think i'm a bully
6 Years Ago
I said you comments was bullying, I don't know you to say your a bully and no why would I block you .. read moreI said you comments was bullying, I don't know you to say your a bully and no why would I block you im not going to block someone because of something they said if I don't really know them.
6 Years Ago
actually i thought my comment was helpful
you seemed lonely,maybe your just a great writerread moreactually i thought my comment was helpful
you seemed lonely,maybe your just a great writer
and you made me feel that way
The sting of loneliness can be one of the worst things of all. I noticed that you wrote it "god" not God. The way you write it is important, because lower case is usually a god like a pagan god or something are worshipping and treating like a god that is not a god. Upper case means God as in the God. This is well written and tragic. I appreciated the religious part of it. It made ponder on my own faith.
Oh ok, I wasn't telling you to fix it....just something that I observed. It was well written either .. read moreOh ok, I wasn't telling you to fix it....just something that I observed. It was well written either way.
6 Years Ago
i know but i should have fixed it long ago,,just lazy i guess
just ask, golden glove boxer years ago,us army veteran ,a contractor is how i make my living,
i am an amateur writer.. been here since june of 2013,couldn`t write then,still can`t.but who cares
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