Rainy Night in Georgia
A Poem by
wordman
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Color me gray as the sky fades to black
color me sad
on this cold rainy night
Rainy night in georgia
takes a toll,
as the rain
falls on my soul
I miss you sweet heart
i need you to hold
i need you to touch me baby
touch my soul
I guess
i should have never let you go
now i feel you sweet heart
deep down in my soul
You see
true love never dies
and as i stand here in the rain
my heart still cries ...
© 2017 wordman
Featured Review
A lovely poem indeed.
A couple suggestions?
All your stanzas have an ABCB rhyme scheme except for the first one. You might want to change the last line in that 1st stanza to something like, "I want my sweetheart back"
Also, I know spelling doesn't count in poetry, in fact, you can even make up your own words, but the last word on the last line should be cries.
Posted 8 Years Ago
2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
thank you karen,lol,learn something every day..never heard of a scale,but it sounds nice
i am.. read more thank you karen,lol,learn something every day..never heard of a scale,but it sounds nice
i am a total ameatur
8 Years Ago
Great critiquing. I need to learn these scales too.
8 Years Ago
just let it come from the heart,break the rules
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The music and the poetry pair well.
It feels like thick, humid misery.
A work of art.
Posted 8 Years Ago
The music and the poetry pair well.
It feels like thick, humid misery.
A work of art.
8 Years Ago
thank you david,i try to pair them together so they compliment each other
I love "color me sad" that was a great line, Ron. Great poem about a sad heart missing a sweet heart, my friend :)
Posted 8 Years Ago
I love "color me sad" that was a great line, Ron. Great poem about a sad heart missing a sweet heart, my friend :)
8 Years Ago
thank you lynn !
8 Years Ago
you be careful out there in the rain tonight!
Very beautiful and well written. I enjoyed it. I loved how you said "Color me sad" as if "sad" has a color. Interesting.
Posted 8 Years Ago
Very beautiful and well written. I enjoyed it. I loved how you said "Color me sad" as if "sad" has a color. Interesting.
8 Years Ago
oh yeah! it has a color,thank you !
Wow this is an amazing piece wordman...the flow of ur words and the emotion moves me...well done!!!
Posted 8 Years Ago
Wow this is an amazing piece wordman...the flow of ur words and the emotion moves me...well done!!!
8 Years Ago
thank you micky,good to see you
Lovely song from lovely poet.
Posted 8 Years Ago
Lovely song from lovely poet.
8 Years Ago
you are to kind,thank`s
This would go beautifully on acoustic guitar... pouring those feelings out my friend. You penned these words perfectly :)
Posted 8 Years Ago
This would go beautifully on acoustic guitar... pouring those feelings out my friend. You penned these words perfectly :)
8 Years Ago
just think what i could do if i had a bottle of bourbon,thank you
8 Years Ago
haha... that would only release the filter my friend :)
You always have the perfect piece of music. On this one I have to wonder if the song didn't spark the poem. It can be pouring when there's not a cloud in the sky.
Posted 8 Years Ago
You always have the perfect piece of music. On this one I have to wonder if the song didn't spark the poem. It can be pouring when there's not a cloud in the sky.
8 Years Ago
no i added the music after,i wrote the poem playing color my world,thank you
8 Years Ago
Oh wow, that's a gave too and I can see how it would have sparked this.
8 Years Ago
half way through the write i played this one
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Added on December 22, 2015
Last Updated on July 1, 2017
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