Rainy Night in Georgia

Rainy Night in Georgia

A Poem by wordman
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Color me gray
as the sky fades to black
color me sad
on this cold rainy night

Rainy night in georgia
takes a toll,
as the rain
falls on my soul

I miss you sweet heart
i need you to hold
i need you to touch me baby
touch my soul

I guess 
i should have never let you go
now i feel you sweet heart
deep down in my soul

You see 
true love never dies
and as i stand here in the rain
my heart still cries ...

© 2017 wordman


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A lovely poem indeed.

A couple suggestions?
All your stanzas have an ABCB rhyme scheme except for the first one. You might want to change the last line in that 1st stanza to something like, "I want my sweetheart back"

Also, I know spelling doesn't count in poetry, in fact, you can even make up your own words, but the last word on the last line should be cries.



Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Jesus & Gypsy Soul

8 Years Ago

Great critiquing. I need to learn these scales too.
 wordman

8 Years Ago

just let it come from the heart,break the rules
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Great write Wordman. Keep it up

Posted 8 Years Ago


 wordman

8 Years Ago

and how are you my friend ! thanks
Terrence Chang

8 Years Ago

I am fine and dandy
Returning to ask for a new write Ron. This one was written in December. I'm having withdrawal pains! ~SP

Posted 8 Years Ago


 wordman

8 Years Ago

i am dried up sharon ! no inspiration ,maybe you could give me a start
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Reflection of a deep feelings..I appreciate your writings..good rhythm with nice flow...

Posted 8 Years Ago


 wordman

8 Years Ago

thank you for stopping by !
Very good. Like a love song from years back.

Posted 8 Years Ago


 wordman

8 Years Ago

thank you kenneth
A fine piece of writing Ron, you Southerners realy are hopeless romantics'
Georgia is on my mind in thjs cool melodic poem. Thanks EG

Posted 8 Years Ago


The whole poem is lovely, but last verse is an epic one, well done!

Posted 8 Years Ago


 wordman

8 Years Ago

thank you insight,appreciate the visit !
Love this. It touches a certain sentimental part of me, a part I never knew existed in this heartless entity haha, will keep an eye out for more of your work.

Posted 8 Years Ago


 wordman

8 Years Ago

thank you for the visit! they usually touch me after i write them.
A poignant poem. True love lingers on, even in the rain. I like your near rhymes.

Posted 8 Years Ago


 wordman

8 Years Ago

and i thank you!

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