Rainy Night in Georgia

Color me gray

as the sky fades to black

color me sad

on this cold rainy night

Rainy night in georgia

takes a toll,

as the rain

falls on my soul

I miss you sweet heart

i need you to hold

i need you to touch me baby

touch my soul

I guess 

i should have never let you go

now i feel you sweet heart

deep down in my soul

You see 

true love never dies

and as i stand here in the rain

my heart still cries ...

Reviews

[GreenShoes]

A lovely poem indeed.

A couple suggestions?
All your stanzas have an ABCB rhyme scheme except for the first one. You might want to change the last line in that 1st stanza to something like, "I want my sweetheart back"

Also, I know spelling doesn't count in poetry, in fact, you can even make up your own words, but the last word on the last line should be cries.

[wordman]

thank you karen,lol,learn something every day..never heard of a scale,but it sounds nice
i am a total ameatur

[Jesus & Gypsy Soul]

Great critiquing. I need to learn these scales too.

[wordman]

just let it come from the heart,break the rules

[Sikandar Khan]

Sir I Really Enjoy This Romantic Piece Of Art By You With Rainy Scenery.....

[wordman]

thank you sikandar,i appreciate your reviews

[Ayvid N]

I simply love the rain. I simply love the realization and regret at letting someone special go. I also love the rythm and rhyme.

[wordman]

thank you,i appreciate your reviews

[Ayvid N]

You are welcome :)

[Tony Jordan]

Holy sausage !! The number of reviews and views -
sorry - how shallow of me but - very well done Wordman!!
Its amazing how a good song can open those word-glands and let the poetry flow.

[wordman]

it was probably the song that drew most of them in,lol,thank you ! i have a couple with over 2000

[Tony Jordan]

wow @ 2k !!
I have to say I like Randy Crawfords rendition better - gives me chills

[wordman]

i will go to you tube and check it out !

[Tony Jordan]

Oh man - bring tissues (no! Not for THAT !! lol)
enjoy

[wordman]

she is great,listened to knocking on heavens door to !

[Tony Jordan]

what by Randy Crawford?
Ah ya see now, that wasn't on the greatest hits CD ...lmao

[wordman]

she has a long list,even some gospel

[Tony Jordan]

I shall fall down her youtube hole tonight with the good headphones on. Cheers Wordman!

[bela]

This is a lovely poem. The tone is melancholy but still filled with hope. I like the way of your writing.

[wordman]

thank you for reading !

[Tom]

A love lost leaves a vacuum of yearning and angst, penned from the heart to sublime effect nice writing wordman !

[wordman]

thank you tom !

[Maria12]

I really like it.It is short in the right sort of way

[wordman]

thank you maria,i hate long poems

[Maria12]

I don't hate then but they can ve demanding.Short ones are harder to write but you have done it well

[Lorry]

Those rainy nights do tune us into reflecting on the could've been's, don't they? Sometimes we need those rainy nights to cleanse our soul, as well as our mind, and see the world from the others point of view. Nicely captured Wordman.

[Ted Kniffen]

A well written tale of longing and regret. Well done. A good write

[wordman]

thank you ted,and i am a ford man to

[Ted Kniffen]

45 years selling Ford parts, so I guess I bleed Ford

[wordman]

i was a ford salesman back in the day

[Ted Kniffen]

A kindred spirit.

[EvaThornburn]

Heart breaker of a poem. Put tears to my eyes. Well done.Thanks, for sharing. Eva

[wordman]

thank you eva,appreciate the review

[Ice Penada]

The last stanza sent me chills. It was so good.

[wordman]

thank you for the visit !