Rainy Night in Georgia

Color me gray

as the sky fades to black

color me sad

on this cold rainy night

Rainy night in georgia

takes a toll,

as the rain

falls on my soul

I miss you sweet heart

i need you to hold

i need you to touch me baby

touch my soul

I guess 

i should have never let you go

now i feel you sweet heart

deep down in my soul

You see 

true love never dies

and as i stand here in the rain

my heart still cries ...

Reviews

[GreenShoes]

A lovely poem indeed.

A couple suggestions?
All your stanzas have an ABCB rhyme scheme except for the first one. You might want to change the last line in that 1st stanza to something like, "I want my sweetheart back"

Also, I know spelling doesn't count in poetry, in fact, you can even make up your own words, but the last word on the last line should be cries.

[wordman]

thank you karen,lol,learn something every day..never heard of a scale,but it sounds nice
i am a total ameatur

[Jesus & Gypsy Soul]

Great critiquing. I need to learn these scales too.

[wordman]

just let it come from the heart,break the rules

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

Beautiful and melancholic
romantic piece nicely penned


These lines got me but
I love this whole piece
because I love rain ☔

You see
true love never dies
and as i stand here in the rain
my heart still cries ...



And it's been
raining ☔and Thundering
in Georgia here all week
😊👍 😊

[wordman]

thank you for the visit,raining here to in tennessee

[Lale]

This love letter is so beautiful. It feels as it's been written yesterday. Feelings are immortal.

[wordman]

thank you for the visit

[Lale]

It's always a pleasure reading your work

[wordman]

glad somebody likes it,,lol

[Lea Sheryn]

This one touches the soul.

[wordman]

then i did my job as a writer,thank you lea

[Lea Sheryn]

You're welcome. It's what we're supposed to do. Nice when it works.

[BlackPrince]

Clearly you've taken the title from a very popular song, and yet your twist and personal poem here is magnificently put together concerning the feeling of longing that love instils in us.

WELL DONE

[wordman]

thank you for the visit

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Oh how beautiful heartfelt poem
Love Conway and Loretta always have

[wordman]

thank you miss julie for the visit..

[FJ Davis]

Who hasn't gone through that rainy night?
A moving portrayal, poet.

[wordman]

thank you for reading,and yes who hasn`t

[Paul]

I can totally appreciate this poem in every feeling of love I've had. Your emotion comes out in this very touching piece. Well done!

Paul

[wordman]

thank you for the visit paul

[Hope]

Rain hides our tears:)
This is a well penned poem and a very touching one!
Thank you so much for sharing!

[wordman]

thank you for reading

[Hope]

My pleasure

[Shannon]

Sadness expressed by rain. I like progression of soul to heart. The change brings attention to the repetition.

[wordman]

that`s what we are,heart and soul,emotions and feelings,dreams and memories..thank you

[Shannon]

For those of us who live more in the intellect than feeling side, you could fix the 'I' S...

[wordman]

nah,it drives intellects wild

[Shannon]

Lol. #$@%/*&§¿!

[APOORVA]

You see
true love never dies
and as i stand here in the rain
my heart still cries ...




you touch the nerves of everyone ever fallen in love
beautiful lines, last 4 lines are unforgettable

[wordman]

thank you for the visit,i appreciate your review