Rainy Night in Georgia
A Poem by
wordman
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Color me gray as the sky fades to black
color me sad
on this cold rainy night
Rainy night in georgia
takes a toll,
as the rain
falls on my soul
I miss you sweet heart
i need you to hold
i need you to touch me baby
touch my soul
I guess
i should have never let you go
now i feel you sweet heart
deep down in my soul
You see
true love never dies
and as i stand here in the rain
my heart still cries ...
© 2017 wordman
Featured Review
A lovely poem indeed.
A couple suggestions?
All your stanzas have an ABCB rhyme scheme except for the first one. You might want to change the last line in that 1st stanza to something like, "I want my sweetheart back"
Also, I know spelling doesn't count in poetry, in fact, you can even make up your own words, but the last word on the last line should be cries.
Posted 8 Years Ago
2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
thank you karen,lol,learn something every day..never heard of a scale,but it sounds nice
i am.. read more thank you karen,lol,learn something every day..never heard of a scale,but it sounds nice
i am a total ameatur
8 Years Ago
Great critiquing. I need to learn these scales too.
8 Years Ago
just let it come from the heart,break the rules
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Reviews
Beautiful and melancholic
romantic piece nicely penned
These lines got me but
I love this whole piece
because I love rain ☔
You see
true love never dies
and as i stand here in the rain
my heart still cries ...
And it's been
raining ☔and Thundering
in Georgia here all week
😊👍 😊
Posted 4 Years Ago
Beautiful and melancholic
romantic piece nicely penned
These lines got me but
I love this whole piece
because I love rain ☔
You see
true love never dies
and as i stand here in the rain
my heart still cries ...
And it's been
raining ☔and Thundering
in Georgia here all week
😊👍 😊
4 Years Ago
thank you for the visit,raining here to in tennessee
This love letter is so beautiful. It feels as it's been written yesterday. Feelings are immortal.
Posted 4 Years Ago
This love letter is so beautiful. It feels as it's been written yesterday. Feelings are immortal.
4 Years Ago
thank you for the visit
4 Years Ago
It's always a pleasure reading your work
4 Years Ago
glad somebody likes it,,lol
This one touches the soul.
Posted 4 Years Ago
This one touches the soul.
4 Years Ago
then i did my job as a writer,thank you lea
4 Years Ago
You're welcome. It's what we're supposed to do. Nice when it works.
Clearly you've taken the title from a very popular song, and yet your twist and personal poem here is magnificently put together concerning the feeling of longing that love instils in us.
WELL DONE
Posted 6 Years Ago
Clearly you've taken the title from a very popular song, and yet your twist and personal poem here is magnificently put together concerning the feeling of longing that love instils in us.
WELL DONE
6 Years Ago
thank you for the visit
Oh how beautiful heartfelt poem
Love Conway and Loretta always have
Posted 6 Years Ago
Oh how beautiful heartfelt poem
Love Conway and Loretta always have
6 Years Ago
thank you miss julie for the visit..
Who hasn't gone through that rainy night?
A moving portrayal, poet.
Posted 6 Years Ago
Who hasn't gone through that rainy night?
A moving portrayal, poet.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
thank you for reading,and yes who hasn`t
I can totally appreciate this poem in every feeling of love I've had. Your emotion comes out in this very touching piece. Well done!
Paul
Posted 7 Years Ago
I can totally appreciate this poem in every feeling of love I've had. Your emotion comes out in this very touching piece. Well done!
Paul
7 Years Ago
thank you for the visit paul
Rain hides our tears:)
This is a well penned poem and a very touching one!
Thank you so much for sharing!
Posted 7 Years Ago
Rain hides our tears:)
This is a well penned poem and a very touching one!
Thank you so much for sharing!
7 Years Ago
thank you for reading
Sadness expressed by rain. I like progression of soul to heart. The change brings attention to the repetition.
Posted 7 Years Ago
Sadness expressed by rain. I like progression of soul to heart. The change brings attention to the repetition.
7 Years Ago
that`s what we are,heart and soul,emotions and feelings,dreams and memories..thank you
7 Years Ago
For those of us who live more in the intellect than feeling side, you could fix the 'I' S...
7 Years Ago
nah,it drives intellects wild
7 Years Ago
Lol. #$@%/*&§¿!
You see
true love never dies
and as i stand here in the rain
my heart still cries ...
you touch the nerves of everyone ever fallen in love
beautiful lines, last 4 lines are unforgettable
Posted 7 Years Ago
You see
true love never dies
and as i stand here in the rain
my heart still cries ...
you touch the nerves of everyone ever fallen in love
beautiful lines, last 4 lines are unforgettable
7 Years Ago
thank you for the visit,i appreciate your review
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Added on December 22, 2015
Last Updated on July 1, 2017
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wordman hixson, TN
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