You and Me

When i woke

this morning ,

you were on my mind .

I just can`t ,

seem to get over you .

seems your always on my mind .

When it comes to you ,

my heart is blind .

i could never see any one else

in my life .

What kind of life

would it be ?

if there were ,

 no you and me ...

Reviews

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Lucky women who will be read this. On romantic dinner with you.

[wordman]

you are to kind,thank you for reading

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you wellcome

[Tanya Y.]

I love this!! I can totally relate, I love how you can feel the rush of emotions when you read this. Very good. :D

[wordman]

happy to give you that rush,thank you !

[Valentine]

Ron, I ask myself that last stanza nearly every day. Doing rereads of yours. Kathie

[wordman]

life is hard kathie,but we have our good times ,sometimes we get a second chance in life

[Neal S]

I can really relate to this poem. The feeling of just stopping and thinking. Wow, who am I without this other person? What am I going to do? ...Very nice piece.

[wordman]

thank you for the review neal !

[barleygirl]

Nicely stated longing . . . the beginning reminded me of "You Were On My Mind" by We Five. But quickly became your own original message, of course.

[wordman]

lol,i remember that song,haven`t heard it for a long time.thank you for reading

[Anindita Janhabee]

Critics - 'woke' can be replaced with 'woke up'.
Either 'I don't seem to get over you' or 'I can't get over you'.
'on my mind' doesn't sound good as 'in my mind'.
'my heart gets blind' is better, yet that's also okay...

now coming to next phase...
emotionally, this poem is just awesome. Apart from grammar, there's a lot remarkable like the emotions and soothing feelings which like an innocent bird caged, cry out of fear of what it would be like if there were no love birds....
sweet and emotional....
Anindita : )

[wordman]

thank you !

[SZHZIA]

ohhh so nice and heart-touching and honest feelings. I am reading it again and again. well written, nice job. thanks for sharing.. :-)


Best
Szhzia

[wordman]

read on my friend ! read on

[SZHZIA]

I will read and review your poems. welcome :-)

[Melobldnfr]

Ah, this definitely resonates.

[wordman]

thank you for the visit !

[Nature]

How much simplicity this poem possess. Wonderful. Hope to create one such piece some day.

'What kind of life would it be? If there were, no you and me.'
Beautiful.

[wordman]

thank you for the visit ! you will write many beautiful poems

[PoeticChico]

What kind of life
would it be ?
if there were ,
no you and me ...

what kind of world will this be if we didn't have poets like you?
your words are so beautifully placed one after another, building an undeniable joyous and romantic flow.
Well done!

[wordman]

a touching review,thank you!