It's not a coincidence that this one poem of yours is the first one on which I leave a comment. Thoughts have flowed through my mind recently about a lost chance, a lost love and here is your poem. I read a quote just yesterday that 'it may hurt to let go but it will hurt more to hang on'. Let go.
I feel sometimes this hiccup is necessary to hold the thing more tightly for which we care the most..I think there will be none who could not relate to it at least once in their lifetime..a very genuine picture with a beautiful tensile tone in words,,it's beautiful
mou.
You have captured a life changing moment. I have been here. There is so much emotion written in your lines. I can actually feel the tug of war between the loyalty of a longtime Love and wanting Freedom.
I can feel the stress, angst and weight of indecision in this. Yes the nagging weight of it - like a scale back & forth. The ending adds to that feeling even more. Cool title. Feeling well-captured indeed.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
i think we all struggle with something in our lives,many times. thank you for the review pete
I really enjoyed reading this. The manic flow, and the haute tension of it was magnificent..truly superb! This poem very much applies to a personal situation I've been in for the past year involving my son and his mother. I relate to every line, and this poem really conveys that sense of emotion we feel..especially after we've gone through "war" with another individual, and now we're left with the aftermath, along with a series of questions in our head and who "we really are." KUDOS! (=
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
brian,i appreciate your review , and i agree hundred percent
"should I stay or should I go, if I go there will be trouble, if I stay it will be double" well so much for the Clash song... love sometimes does this to you, confusion reigns... too often we stay longer than we should and it isn't good for both people... enjoyed the tension and dilemma in this poem Ron..
just ask, golden glove boxer years ago,us army veteran ,a contractor is how i make my living,
i am an amateur writer.. been here since june of 2013,couldn`t write then,still can`t.but who cares
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