Almost like a song

I lie here every night,

wishing , i could hold you tight;

as your beauty echoes softly through my mind,

as my heart,you gently entwine.

 

I feel your presence by my side,

as you gently unfold in my mind;

as we make love,i feel your soft skin,

as it caresses mine.

 

It was almost like a song,

the orchestra gently playing ;

as our bodies dance along,

then i awake, with tears in my eyes.

 

When i roll over to hold you,

i realize,it was just a dream;

as you,

lay gentle on my mind...

,

Author's Note

2 nd place in any poetry contest

Reviews

[Paul]

I enjoyed reading this poem, wordman. I could feel the emotion in your words here. Well done!

[wordman]

Thank you paul !

[Winslow Des Totes]

Aww this hurts just to read. Potent and striking diction and a very strong ending, great job!

[wordman]

i thank you for the visit !

[Shannon]

Other than the obvious romantic link, I see a pattern that you connect mind, body and emotion.

Are you interested in ideas for improvement?

[wordman]

give it to me

[Shannon]

When you restrict the number of words, as in poetry, each word becomes more important. I might suggest looking at the use of mind, and especially caress twice and find other words.

[wordman]

thank you !

[Shannon]

Anytime. ☺️

[Meredith]

Beautiful vivid imagery. very poetic. Nice write :)

[wordman]

thank you for the visit ! i appreciate them all.

[Karmee]

I love this song, Ronnie Milsap is amazing!
They just don't have musicians like him anymore.
Love your write as well. It's beautiful.

[wordman]

thank you !

[Karmee]

no problem....I posted mine i have had for a while it's called I'll leave this world loving you.

[SZHZIA]

beautifully written in so simple words. Thanks for sharing... :-)


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Szhzia

[wordman]

lol,you are making me blush.

[SZHZIA]

Ohh No! I am not making you blush. :-)

[barleygirl]

You are singing my song . . . ever so gently & with such truth & so relatable. As we age, more & more of our friends lose their significant others, so we see & feel these very things more often than we wish. Your pacing is the best part of this message . . . it floats along with a dreamlike quality, then gradually awakening to the true sadness of the situation. Very beautifully stated.

[wordman]

thank you very much,you make it sound as if i knew what i was doing !

[Cyndy Robinson]

Beautiful read, love the play on lyrics in songs. Really clear expression!

[wordman]

thank you for the visit !

[mou]

you have penned very well.reflection of a beautiful poetic thought.

[wordman]

thank you mou for the visit !

[mou]

you are much welcome..