After The Fall

After The Fall

A Story by wordman
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It was the night before Christmas

and all through the house

no one was home not even the mouse


But all a sudden appeared the

ghost of times past

come with me I heard her say

let me take you to a fonder day


As my eyes focused

I could see a wedding

it was me on my wedding day


You were so beautiful

a glow coming from your face

ahh then came the children 1,2 and 3

not much time for you and me


As the years went by

the glow slowly faded away

it seemed we argued most everyday

I guess we didn`t have much in common after all


And now it seems it`s time for the fall

the kids are grown and we`ve grown apart

it seems nothing comes from the heart

is it to late for a new start


Or could we find what we lost

and if we did what would it cost

could we ever start again

could we ever be friends


I guess only time will tell

but right now were both living in hell

is it to late for a new start

do we really want to part

can we find what we lost

and if we did what would it cost


And if we cross that bridge of

no return what would it cost

what would we learn...

© 2016 wordman


Author's Note

 wordman
hell this looks like a book ..we have a lot of divorce after years of marriage
this is where the insp came from

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First, let me say I love it. And then food for thought: I love the ending. And also, when I read the word "BRIDGE" > I thought, that's their bridge, thus cross OUR bridge, once steady and strong...? something, was thinking about the foundation of their bridge - once concreted, cemented, (by the best engineers) no cracks in that foundation, the cables, strong, they would never fall. Suspension Bridges. Maybe that's silly: I love this poem, you are a great writer. I see the song writing in the continueing of what is almost like a chorus. I was in this poem, myself, thinking of my past, and it is so relatable in a throw away world. I love the theme, the start, the change in tone...led me to more emotional sadness and then as I hoped, you gave them a chance to begin anew. I take marriage very seriously; the message is quite beautiful. Thank you so much - Oh and lastly sorry: please don't take offense; I have errors in posted poetry now: (too) late for a new start. I love this. Like you said, it is so hard to resist southern Thinkin! Thank you again.

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I think it's sad when a marriage dies. It happens every day.
Well penned.

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Well written again, my friend! Too many people nowadays marry for the wrong reasons. Too many people rush into marriage before they ever have the chance to get to know one another. They rush to have kids before they even figure out how to live together without much issue.

This is why I am thankful of my husband's understanding. We have known each other for nearly 8 years. We have been together for 5 and married for 3. Still no kids yet, as we are waiting until we are more financially stable.

We don't want to rush anything, because we want our kids to grow up in a house with hardly any arguments or yelling. We want our kids to have a stable environment that won't change once they are grown. We want our kids to see how marriage really works. How they should treat others in a way that won't cause harm mentally or physically. It won't be perfect, we know that, but we can always strive for it.

Sorry I'm rambling. Great work!

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I am sixty years old and I am going to share with you what a man I met on a city bus expressed to me just a few years back and I am at least 30 years his senior.He said that we fall in-love and get married,then once the children come we tend to fall out of love,and once the children go out from the nest you find yourselves walking down the beach or in a park and you hold hands again as you're walking and this is when you fall in-love again.You had enjoyed something in the beginning when you first held hands try revisiting those times even if you just go for coffee and pie try to recall when you first realized that you loved each other nice poem

Bill



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W R Stowe

9 Years Ago

you act like a child without any upbringing sir and should be reported to the FCC
So this is not autobiographical? I hope it is not. You've written it well...and it happens far oo often in today's world. ~Sharon

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This is great, man! I liked how you started out with that part from the Christmas story, and I really liked how it progressed, even if it didn't end so well for you. My favorite parts were the last four stanzas (is that what you call them?), from "And now it's time for the fall" until the end. Great job.

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It seems impossible that the heat of first love can turn so toxic over a period of time. Children do take time away from parents and the effect of that becomes evident when they grow up and find their own lives. It is only hard work from both parties that can sustain a relationship.
Nice work and food for thought.

Helen :)

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Truth or fiction. If the truth, go for counseling together or a preacher that you trust. If not then you seemed to hit the nail on the head with the rate of marriages failing. A good write and one to get people to stop and think. Valentine

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 wordman

9 Years Ago

well I missed this comment it`s truth for half of america
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