In the Still of the Night

In the still of the night

all matters of the heart

come to light

 

I smell the perfume

in your hair

as I lie here beside you

waiting for your caress

 

like a child

in a candy store

the flickering fire light

shows your shadow as a silhouette

my mouth watering my hands wet

 

and then you touch me

I explode inside my feelings

for you I could never hide

 

do you know how much

I love you

do you know how you make me feel

did you know I would die for you

if it was your will

 

yes baby! that's how I feel

after all these years

this is how you make me feel

 

just by the touch of your hand

my heart you still command...

Reviews

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Again thank you for entering this poem in my little competition.
Please understand that I cannot comment now as this would be unfair to other entries.
I shall return after the contest ends.
Very best regards.
Clive.
P.S. like this. Don't tell anyone

[wordman]

twitter,facebook.you tube lol thanks for letting me enter

[Pryde Foltz]

like a child
in a candy store
the flickering fire light
shows your shadow as a silhouette
my mouth watering my hands wet

This one is a stand out for me, Ron. Expert work.

[wordman]

thank you for stopping by pryde

[Aethereal]

Very romantic with the scent of perfume, magic touches, and endearing silhouettes. In the first verse take the “s” off of “comes”. In the fourth verse perhaps:

and as you touch me
I explode with feeling for you
that I could never hide.

[Ruth]

Oh, this is so soft and beautiful! Love in elegant tones, superb x

[Im His Daughter]

holy snack man..... I had a little pitter patter lets get at her in my heart.... wooo this was awesome... made my heart beats move faster.. (blush)

[wordman]

thank you for reading

[Helen Woodward]

Ron, these are powerful words! They give your reader an injection of what love is supposed to feel like. It is so wonderful to be loved like this and you have transferred those feelings to the page eloquently.

Cheers from Australia :)
Helen...

[wordman]

thank you very much for reading I appreciate it
Ron

[Joyce S. Greene]

This poem is a true reflection of your love, and it is very beautiful. You are definitely a poet who writes from the heart.

[NA]

Beautifully done...enjoyed :) x

[Mike Cole]

I definitely know what it is like the feelings described in you rpoem it was very good and very descriptive keep writing