In the Still of the Night

In the still of the night

all matters of the heart

come to light

 

I smell the perfume

in your hair

as I lie here beside you

waiting for your caress

 

like a child

in a candy store

the flickering fire light

shows your shadow as a silhouette

my mouth watering my hands wet

 

and then you touch me

I explode inside my feelings

for you I could never hide

 

do you know how much

I love you

do you know how you make me feel

did you know I would die for you

if it was your will

 

yes baby! that's how I feel

after all these years

this is how you make me feel

 

just by the touch of your hand

my heart you still command...

Reviews

[James]

I see honesty and love all the way through top to bottom here. It really romantic and the last lines are the best wordman!!!

[wordman]

thank you for the visit james

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Wordman, this is really beautiful. I'm thinking my favorite of yours so far that I've read :)

[wordman]

thanks again lynn,i think will you marry me or romeo and Juliet might be my best two
I guess it`s where your coming from is what touches you

[Miss Sharon]

Be still my beating heart! This is SO beautiful and romantic my dear friend. A joy to read. ~Sharon

[wordman]

thank you Sharon,i appreciate your visit

[JayceeC]

Out of all of you're work that I've read, this is the best. It's honest and upfront like most of your writes but its more fleshed out and complete. Only real suggestion is to add a line break in strophe four Since this is written without punctuation the line break, while it looks good, interrupts the flow and meaning rathet than pulling you to the next line. Im putting this in my library though. I just like it that much.

[wordman]

thank you for the visit,and I will check it out

[Ghost of Jupiter]

Such a passionate love that awakens with just a touch of the hand.. Wow that is something to write about, and to hold onto. Love the emotion in this poem, well done.

[wordman]

thank you for the visit

[Tiana]

I love the softness of your poem. Your love just flows effortlessly in this beautifully written poem. Great choice of music.

[wordman]

thank you for reading,merry christmas to you and your family

[Bright Ocean Star]

Wordman, this is sensitive, passionate, and beautiful. You write with your heart, and your emotion comes out in waves. I love the first three stanzas, the imagery of the firelight and the stillness of the night is very romantic. I love that you weaved through the excited emotions of the moment with your hands sweating and your mouth watering, the silouette of the woman you love in the flickering light of the fire. Very beautiful. One small correction that you probably already caught: 2nd stanza, third line. "As I lye here beside you"...lye should be lie or maybe lay. Autocorrect probably wouldn't catch it, because lye is a chemical used to make soap. But, besides that it flows elegantly and is a beautiful, beautiful piece. I don't think I've read a more simply, romantic firelight moment on here. It was treasured. Thank you for sharing it.

[wordman]

you make me blush,thank you

[Bright Ocean Star]

You are welcome...:)

[Confuser]

You are a great writer. The words flowed so wonderfully. O'how I wish I could write like this; and any woman would be beaming to hear them said to her. Your back story is wonderful. My husband will love the Golden Gloves and the Army. He was in the National Guard army yrs ago, but we both are boxing fans. I cannot believe how I enjoy it. That's something I'm still puzzled by...What a beautiful love story, so honest and inspiring, especially to someone that cannot write a single lick, a single line of love, especially one so devine as yours. I must listen to the song "The game of love." I am a music lover as well, and when I read, candy store, it reminded me of a summer song, long gone. Thank you for such a wonderful write! Thank you.

[wordman]

you are too kind but i thank you for your visit
never lost a fight have several golden gloves lol never knew i could write it just came

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A very inspiring piece that exudes love in all aspect, well done.

[wordman]

I really appreciate your visit

[MsJewel]

..and this is the way love should be...forever and ever...happily ever after!

:) Julie

[wordman]

thank you julie

[MsJewel]

My pleasure. Your poem is lovely!