Winds of Time

The winds of time

blowing gently through my mind

telling me things long forgot

that I had placed deep into my mind

 

the sweet sound of your voice

the gentleness of your touch

the love that you gave

that I need so much

 

I long for your kiss

your sweet touch

I miss you so much

 

do you still love me

I know that you do

cause the winds of time

is blowing on you too...

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

i feel the want and serenity from your speaker ... memories that lift up and remind us of things that were right ;) V1 L4 ..may i suggest changing "mind" to something else rather than repeating it from L2 ... and again in V3 L2 something other than "touch" as it is used in V2 .. perhaps "your sweet breath' instead ...unless you are conforming to some particular form ... i like the softness and the gentle breezes playing their part in this one ...makes me feel wistful
E.

[wordman]

point taken my friend,thank you for the visit

[Mirror]

"do you still love me
I know that you do
cause the winds of time
is blowing on you too..."

This runs through the mind and make you wonder. Can love be the same measure? Because everything is the same; the same wind, the same time, but is it the same love? I wonder.

[wordman]

true love will always be with you,you will always feel it..thank you

[Kathy Van Kurin]

"Winds of Time"
wordman,
This poem of yours was refreshing. Gentle in memory but forthright too:
"The winds of time
blosing gently through my mind
telling me things long forgot
that I had place deep into my mind"
I like the feeling of a soft wind blowing and moving, as through the writer's mind:
"sweet sound of your voice" gentleness of your touch" 'love that you gave," I need so much"
The thrid stanza is the culmination of the one before:
"long for your kiss" "sweet touch' miss you so much"
Then in the last stanza, a positive and self revealing and hopeful end:
"do you still love me"
I know that you do
cause the winds of time'is blwing on you too..."
We want love. We hope for it.
Great words sir.
Kathy

[wordman]

thank you kathie,i really appreciate this great review

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Wordman,
You are really welcome. Wishing you good and life happiness.
Kathy

[wordman]

i need all i can get,,thank you !

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Me too. See you again sir. Keep up the wonderful writing!

[wordman]

sir,lol, how bout ron

[Valentine]

Love the picture and the words. Hope you get back to writing soon. Valentine

[wordman]

thank you kathie,just don`t get a lot of time anymore,and maybe i`m just out of words,

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You are so sweet :) This is beautiful and romantic...

[wordman]

thank`s lynn !

[Jane Taylor Hardy]

Whoa I loved this...soft as a whisper from the moon....and I usually don't like to comment on things like this but shouldn't the last line read "are blowing on you too..." because winds is plural?...none of my business but just in case you didn't catch it. But let's not detract from that soft whisper of the moon. That is what I want to be left with :0)

[wordman]

but jane ,it would mess with my flow.and i am dumb sometimes,well most times
thank you very much

[Indra Neil]

beautiful imagery in this heartfelt write! 'winds of time' - this is a wonderful metaphor! well done my friend! :)

[wordman]

thank you very muck indra

[Indra Neil]

You are welcome!

[Bright Ocean Star]

Love this one! It is serene and beautiful. It reminds me of the breezes blowing off the water in the 'winds of tme'. Positively Lovely. Your voice is soft and transportive in this piece. Thank you, Wordman.

[wordman]

thank you for reading