Just Another Piece of Work

Two blocks down the street,
just around the corner from joy,
someone put in a new sidewalk.
At one corner, a heart, an arrow,
two sets of initials, bound
in concrete and eternal hope.

I walk by, and feel the arrow shift,
your initials etched deep into my heart.
I'm pouring a thick layer of time over them,
waiting in stone-stoic patience
for the cure of these wet words
into just another piece of work.

Reviews

[ju]

OK, so written with passion, heat, high emotion- then shelved 'til it all seems a long time ago? Read from the safe distance of years. Or letting time do it's healing b4 you write? i'm with the latter, i think. maybe i'm right off track.
hey- look joel- i can edit reviews too. keep your eyes peeled for changes ;)

[FJ Davis]

Very touching sentiment conjured by the near-perfect imagery of a more-talented-than-he-knows artist.
Outstanding, Joel!

[Audrey Howitt]

My first read today Joel. Such nice work. Well thought out and executed. There is a certain distance between the lover and the loved here and the emotion associated with the loved is just a little ephemeral--Love it. Thank you!

this is beautiful, enjoyable read

[Lily Mae]

I feel the same as Neva..its feels as if you've stepped into a memory here. A poem of a love from long ago and oh how it still effects the heart. Great write my friend:) x

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

A beautiful piece. I do believe perhaps a walk through memories........

[LA Lorena]

Oh, loved the imagery of this write Joel, very creative!