Silent night

Your receding steps
echo upon my forehead
like dripping torture.

Drops of memories
patter down gently, wet your
unused pillowcase.

A gulf of unsaid
endearments erode the shore of
common happiness.

Silence, like water,
a universal solvent:
breaking down years of
bonds which held us together,
watching love spiral away.

Reviews

[Jimmy Yetts]

Was impressed with your portraying silence--like water--as a universal solvent; both can "drown" human beings--and, in a very real way, eventually eat away at them.
Don't know if I would have noticed that backward thing, though I've long been considered quite backward.
A substantial offering, Joel of the Frye Clan.

[Leigh]

A lot is said in reverse, which creates a feeling of movement and the pain of loss. Very creative, your words are nicely chosen.

[Joel M Frye]

Very perceptive of you, Leigh, as the poem was written in reverse. Glad I am to have reached a reader of depth.

[Death's Poet]

Wow. This was so incredibly sad in the most beautiful way. Most poetry is meant to make us feel something and this certainly does. I can almost see the poor soul crying into the pillow. Super well done. I can't wait to read more of your work. This is absolutely beautiful

[Joel M Frye]

If my words made you see and feel, they've done their job, Shadow. Thank you for your kind words.

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~~ in 2009-2010... i was in such a bad state that for over six months i was crying in my sleep and waking up because i would feel my tears on my face or on my pillow... ~~ thankfully, i haven't been through that kind of trauma again... ~~ this piece reminds me of that... ~~ i never could express what it was like... i didn't even talk about what was happening to me with anyone... ~~ at the same time, i cannot believe that i made it to this moment... with my spirit intact... ~~ personal peace is attainable... even in the most painful personal circumstances... at least that's what happened with me...

[Joel M Frye]

The "thing with feathers", when imbued with human spirit, is indeed invincible. Having been privy to a portion of your journey, I'm well aware of the Way you travel, and how far you've come. Blessings, mlle. serah.

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~~ thanks a million for all the precious words and blessings you send my way, monsieur Bear... ~~ i'm really lucky that you know me... and have helped me reach this point of peace... ~~ thank you especially for helping me understand the various levels of my complex situation...

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~~ and i send you my best... as always...