Memory Lane

My skin tingles, as the souvenir of your caresses

Leaps out of the shadows, when I drive past our trysting

Place; a hand tracing electric pathways on the skin.

Your body, and  inviting blank page -I write a poem on it,

With my lips for a quill,  and kisses for ink; soft long

Strokes in languorous sentences, measured verse, rhyme

And meter, as you would expect, in a predictably measured

Hypnotic rhythm; but then, I jump to an immediacy that is

All so modern and free, the unexpected eccentric strokes of the

Upper case, tiny scintillating lower case and no meter, no rhyme,

Madness all over the place, dissembled and surrealist,

You never know where a new verse,  the kiss, will fall next.

For now, I hold you close against me and I feel you hard,

Till the car  gradually leaves behind memory lane;

now we are no longer there -I gently let go of you.

Reviews

[Michael X]

i really enjoyed this poem, its soft, sensual, and whispered to the readers heart, soothing,
peaceful, the entire scene is captivating an just about hypnotic, i loved the metaphorical
aspect, have yet to read a romantic piece such as this, using diolog context,
gentle sentiments, beautifully written, sweet, and passionate. very nice work, thanks.

[Ed Hart]

"madness all over the place"...a consummation devoutly to be wished...

[Ralphy]

The way the words create a panoramas view that conveys a unique landscape of the mind. Choice of words increase the resolution and romance as you await the next segment to unfold. The robust wording of the heart keeps the reader at bay as a certain common interest is prancing before their eyes. The warning signs "slippery when wet" appear ahead as the car sways to avoid the puddle. The ravishing detail with sudden change simmers in the background as the end beckons. I love the creative nature of expression in this poem. it was a great read. Thank you for sharing it.

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Wow. This literally gave me the chills reading this, and thats good thing, meaning this is an excellent write. Such a romantic piece. Nicely Done.


Great Write.

[KEi]

Welcome to WritersCafe.
:)

I'm liking this. Very... wordy.
Wordiness is good.

I can't wait for the final product.
:D

[EvesDaughter]

so far so good ;)
I can't wait to read the finished
product. You've got a great way
of designing your words to draw
the perfect image. Good writing.

Oh, and welcome to WC :)