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 when the night falls down 

 in our tears we all drown 

 and the silence starts to sink 

 it gets dark we start to think 

 connect the dots & find the link

 collect the thoughts ,i'm on the brink 

 of a major fall, i've seen it all 

 self loathing, an internal brawl 

 my time to leave, i got my call

 betrayed drained then played

 but true to myself i stayed 

 

 call me worthless, a waste of breath

 say i'm stupid & all i deserve is death 

 call me ugly 

 call me what u want

 used to think that you'd call me 

 now i know that you won't 

 

 I look for a reason to live 

 but i can't find the will 

 I don't have anything to give 

 only time and heart to kill 

Reviews

[Ali]

I think this was brilliant! The rhythm was on point, I felt like your poem would be incredible to read out loud. Just one point I would improve, the sentence now i know that you won't (I is with capital letter ofcours but that is a minor detail) feels a little bit out of place, maybe you could look in to that? Anyway, I would appreciate it immensely if you could check out my page... (;

[Gamaliel Pam]

I usually write unrhymed verses, but I enjoyed your rhyme scheme. Not sure if your spellings are intentional though. If they are not, you should pay more attention.

[Angel]

Wow..very good for your first post. Can't wait to read more :)