"The First Sight"

"The First Sight"

A Poem by Rache David
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I should have looked at you much longer... longer than I could remember.

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My eyes took a snapshot �"

Of you, in a hat

A smile so genuine;

And a face -- not in-between;

 

So easy, I fell without a gear

And love’s bell chimed in my ear

Reality becomes a dream

All I see were in gleam

 

Yet a thought loomed in my head

Pain he’ll bring -- as it said.

My mind was a great enemy;

Leaving me with uncertainty

 

The moment enchanted --

Is the day to be cursed

For when your eyes ran to my way;

I chose to look away.

© 2015 Rache David


Author's Note

Rache David
Just catching up for the long time I didn't write...
I think this is kind of simple... But please,, I hope you read it..
:-)

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So very nicely presented, sometimes we make choices that are wrong...
Sometimes it brings happiness sometimes sadness. that is why we have regrets.
enjoyed your write

Posted 3 Years Ago


A gorgeous poem. It is so true that in the heat of the moment, we lose focus and sight. Then to walk away, we lose the one chance. I have those regrets too. It is natural and you point that you point that out marvelously.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Rache David

4 Years Ago

Yeah. Some people choose to walk away because of fear. Thank you for that constructive comment. :)
Sami Khalil

4 Years Ago

You are welcome...
Seems we make choices even when we make no choice... hindsight is a sweet daydream as we walk our paths.

Posted 4 Years Ago


You say the poem is simple, but it is very effective. I love many of the lines, 'Reality becomes a dream.', 'Yet a thought loomed in my head'. 'I chose to look away'. So many times we look away, and then wonder what could have been. Well written.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rache David

6 Years Ago

Thank you.
You’re right. Some people ignore some situations that they think will just disa.. read more
Great Aunt Astri

6 Years Ago

Do you know, I don't remember making this review, but then it was 6 months ago! :
My favorite line is "my eyes took a snapshot". That is a really good line. Is this one of those moments when you spot someone in public and wonder "what if?" I didn't understand the statement "fell without gear"...maybe because of our cultural differences...could you explain?

Posted 9 Years Ago


Rache David

9 Years Ago

Yeah right. :) as for that line.. it's like "being caught off-guard"
Anyways, thanks you for .. read more

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Added on July 11, 2015
Last Updated on July 11, 2015
Tags: snapshot, mind pain, love, dream, reality, uncertainty, enchanted, cursed, look, eyes

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Rache David
Rache David

NCR, Philippines



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I'm a psychology graduate. I'm 20 years old. I love reading English novels and love to listen to classical musics. I love exploring things. Because I believe there's something more astounding and eth.. more..

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A Poem by Rache David