A Shadow of Her

A Shadow of Her

A Poem by Rache David
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"You can't see me, because all you see is her"

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You seize my heart -- yours is with her;

My love falls to you -- you catch her;

She’s gone --  life to a leave-taking;

Yet here I am -- still breathing.

 

In front of eyes -- what do they see?

Every time they landed on me;

Because her beauty won’t fade --

Painted and eternally made.

 

How can I win against your girl?

When you hold her as precious pearl;

If I’m just an ocean-pebble -- 

Ordinary, not valuable.

 

I -- the one rising before you;

Offering a boundless love too.

Your sight cannot notice either -- 

For, I’m just a shadow of her.

© 2014 Rache David


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Rache David
Hope you like it.. :-)

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Wonderful write! I love the first stanza.

Posted 2 Years Ago


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If someone has someone else in their heart, they will hardly look our way.. it is best to give our heart a break and look for eyes that will see us before we see them. Great juxtapositions!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Deep, reflective and honest.
A wonderful piece.
Thank you for sharing.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Rache David

10 Years Ago

thank you.. I'm glad you liked it.. :-)
Rache David

9 Years Ago

yeah you're right.. It may be hard .. but it's not impossible..it may take time but you'l get there .. read more
Heavy and emotive. Nothing like the offer of boundless love...Bravo................

Posted 10 Years Ago


Rache David

10 Years Ago

Thank you for the comment.. :-)
I'm glad you liked it....
Sami Khalil

10 Years Ago

You are welcome:)........
I was reminded slightly of Adel's "someone like you" song when I read this. It is not easy to be put in the back image of another woman despite however your heart may feel. I can feel your sorrow in this poem. Good write!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Rache David

10 Years Ago

really? thank you so much for the comment..
It's really hard to see someone ,even she's in fro.. read more
Simply feel your heart in every word you wrote...simply brilliant.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Rache David

10 Years Ago

thank you so much..:-)
I put my heart in it.. :-D
A. Amos

10 Years Ago

You're most welcome
Ah. so many youngsters have suffered like the one in the poem ... love can be so fickle! You have done well with the rhyming and I like the near rhymes.. pebble, valuable and either, her. It makes one pick up ones ears and listen.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Rache David

10 Years Ago

yeah that's right. i agree..
. thank you for your comment.. I'm glad you liked it..
For starters I love the title suits it so well.
Second of all it was so poetic which is awesome.
Your rhyming is brilliant.
The piece has so much deep meaning to it as well.
I love the whole story line, this was the best/my favorite line:

How can I win against your girl?
When you hold her as precious pearl;

LOVED THIS BRILLIANTLY WRITTEN HUN!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Rache David

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much 'Cimmonne'.. glad you like it.. :-)
cimmy wuv xxxooo

10 Years Ago

you are most welcome :)
Very well written poem...Very emotive of a battle between the heart and
Inner self. The dictation, with poignant imagery captured...emotional
Turmoil expressed in this write is amazing and pulls on the heart's strings.

Very relatable, most of us have been there, humans tend to be selfish and blind.
Good luck
In whatever choice in your decision you chose. Thanks for sharing. This
Resonated with me.


Posted 10 Years Ago


Rache David

10 Years Ago

thank you barriejoy. I'm not really talking about myself in my poem.. It's general. As what you said.. read more
ms. barrie

10 Years Ago

You're very welcome, Rachel.
i would NEVER put up with a PIG's bigamy! It would be me ONLY, or I'd be outta there!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Rache David

10 Years Ago

I understand you.. But sometimes it's quite hard for people who are really in love..
RONGORONGO::^/JEUSSEN/FUNKSPEILS/SCR-67

10 Years Ago


No offense, but that's pathetic. I was in a WRETCHED, loveless, neglected marriage with a man.. read more
Rache David

10 Years Ago

I'm sorry for that.. Did I offend you with my work? I understand you, and if I was in your position .. read more

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Rache David
Rache David

NCR, Philippines



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