If someone has someone else in their heart, they will hardly look our way.. it is best to give our heart a break and look for eyes that will see us before we see them. Great juxtapositions!
Deep, reflective and honest.
A wonderful piece.
Thank you for sharing.
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
thank you.. I'm glad you liked it.. :-)
9 Years Ago
yeah you're right.. It may be hard .. but it's not impossible..it may take time but you'l get there .. read moreyeah you're right.. It may be hard .. but it's not impossible..it may take time but you'l get there one day.. :-).. thank you for your comment..
I was reminded slightly of Adel's "someone like you" song when I read this. It is not easy to be put in the back image of another woman despite however your heart may feel. I can feel your sorrow in this poem. Good write!
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
really? thank you so much for the comment..
It's really hard to see someone ,even she's in fro.. read morereally? thank you so much for the comment..
It's really hard to see someone ,even she's in front of you, if she's not the one in your heart...
Ah. so many youngsters have suffered like the one in the poem ... love can be so fickle! You have done well with the rhyming and I like the near rhymes.. pebble, valuable and either, her. It makes one pick up ones ears and listen.
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
yeah that's right. i agree..
. thank you for your comment.. I'm glad you liked it..
For starters I love the title suits it so well.
Second of all it was so poetic which is awesome.
Your rhyming is brilliant.
The piece has so much deep meaning to it as well.
I love the whole story line, this was the best/my favorite line:
How can I win against your girl?
When you hold her as precious pearl;
LOVED THIS BRILLIANTLY WRITTEN HUN!
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
Thank you so much 'Cimmonne'.. glad you like it.. :-)
Very well written poem...Very emotive of a battle between the heart and
Inner self. The dictation, with poignant imagery captured...emotional
Turmoil expressed in this write is amazing and pulls on the heart's strings.
Very relatable, most of us have been there, humans tend to be selfish and blind.
Good luck
In whatever choice in your decision you chose. Thanks for sharing. This
Resonated with me.
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
thank you barriejoy. I'm not really talking about myself in my poem.. It's general. As what you said.. read morethank you barriejoy. I'm not really talking about myself in my poem.. It's general. As what you said, most of the people have been there. Perhaps. I'm showing this , in perspective of anybody who feels the same way.
I understand you.. But sometimes it's quite hard for people who are really in love..
10 Years Ago
No offense, but that's pathetic. I was in a WRETCHED, loveless, neglected marriage with a man.. read more
No offense, but that's pathetic. I was in a WRETCHED, loveless, neglected marriage with a man I believed was a good man but he was all words and no action, except for sex in other people's beds. He was given an ultimatum, to break off the affair he was in with a disgusting bad woman and he thought he'd “have his cake and eat it too”, so he lost me in the end. As I said, I would be outta there if I wasn't his ONE AND ONLY. And I wasn't. So I was outta there. I hope you find some peace and growth!
10 Years Ago
I'm sorry for that.. Did I offend you with my work? I understand you, and if I was in your position .. read moreI'm sorry for that.. Did I offend you with my work? I understand you, and if I was in your position I would leave that relationship too. People won't think the same way.. So that's the purpose of my work, like speaking on their perspectives.
I'm a psychology graduate. I'm 20 years old. I love reading English novels and love to listen to classical musics. I love exploring things. Because I believe there's something more astounding and eth.. more..