The Phoenix

The Phoenix

A Poem by hanselwheresgretel?
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I think inspiration is birth out of wonder. And we need to practice wonder, consciously. With little everyday things. To overcome that jadedness.

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It looms like a cloud over me, 
a growing mountain range 
rising from the cityscape horizon

Weaving itself full of bindings
It's foul menace greys in its greed
A pregnant malice with outstretched wings
Vast. 

Lo, with thunder it bursts into tears
Sudden and cleansing in its birth
I stay out. Out in its anointing ash
For not till all is washed away will i hide
and there is nothing left.

© 2015 hanselwheresgretel?


Author's Note

hanselwheresgretel?
All opinions are more than welcomed, they're appreciated and (to be frank) needed. thank you!

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a profound and deep brevity with vivid imagery! brilliant composition! well done!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


hanselwheresgretel?

9 Years Ago

Glad you liked it! please feel free to scrutinise the rest ;)
Indra Neil

9 Years Ago

I will! :)
I have always been fascinated by the image of the Phoenix rising out from the ashes. A beautiful metaphor and so inspiring just as your poem is. Great job!

Posted 9 Years Ago


hanselwheresgretel?

9 Years Ago

Appreciate your kind words, Dara! especially from one who writes so much and well :)
Dara

9 Years Ago

I am very humbled by your words. Thank you so much!
I love it! ( I am knit picking here, but "vast, outstretched wings") might sound better. My favorite is the last stanza. It is so well-written!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


hanselwheresgretel?

9 Years Ago

please! pick all the knits you want ;) love and appreciate the input and encouragement!
Ella

9 Years Ago

haha I will ;). Of Course, any time!
If I were to describe your writing style, I would say that your words are like vines that keep wreathing around the mind, forcing it to reflect - over and over again - upon what it has red. Your poems have so much life in them. They´re wonderful :)

J

Posted 9 Years Ago


hanselwheresgretel?

9 Years Ago

You are too kind, Ju :) Glad and surprised it had that effect on you. let me know what you think abo.. read more

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Added on July 10, 2015
Last Updated on July 11, 2015
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Petaling Jaya, Malaysia



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Malaysian Chinese 1990 5'11" guy who secretly writes too much. Needs a place to dump all the scribbles, so here i am. Working in Human Resources, studying for my masters in counseling psychology. .. more..

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