Love's Pen

I will not render

sweet nothings

on the pelt

of your heart

 

These, 

I leave willingly 

to this

and that

 

My love pen

pierces passionate

penetrating

deep

drawing the ink

from love’s well

 

I will write

but

are you sure

you can recite?

Reviews

[Matthew Kult]

Actions do speak louder than words but its the words that make us feel special. Silly, when both actions and words can be untruths. But we really on our faith from both to finally find the truth and fall into cuddles.

Always and with love,

Jayden D.

[Shannon]

A call to action, a challenge. I especially like the double entendre of the third stanza. Bold without being trashy.

[Renée]

Swinging my feet as I read it again, and again, its lovely ( :

[Mama Topaz]

Wow! From the title through to the end... I felt the inking spilling onto the paper... excellent job!!

[Robbie~xoxo~]

I enjoyed reading this Romantic piece...I could easily be enamored by your magical pen. Lovely write.

[Belle]

Words are direct and plain, but the piece hits like Eros' sphere.

[Seracies]

I thought the title was pretty powerful for this one, while I was reading it I could just imaging the writer sitting there with an artful pen and black ink, writing those words that just seemed to flow out onto the page. I enjoyed it =)

[Poetic Beauty]

I love how you are willing to write down in a poem how you feel but does she love you back and is she will to be dedicated enough to recite it. Love the imagery and the metaphor in this poem. the last stanza is my favorite.

[Helen Crutchett]

Awesome! Just awesome.

"My love pen
pierces passionate
penetrating
deep
drawing the ink
from love’s well"

Sigh....sooo romantic my friend. :)

[Dark Empress]

I like this :)