A Phoenix

Rondel

To new horizons, to wide open skies

These dreams will dance and fly

And welcome love without surmise

Or doubt that may deny

 

Worries to wane and hope to rise

Soar high in heavens shall I

To new horizons, to wide open skies

These dreams will dance and fly

 

Though death may dangle its defy

to mortal make and earthly eyes

a phoenix  anew I will arise

look beyond what mortal eyes espy

to new horizons, to wide open sky

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you could almost make me like rhyme with this one...i love how you use "surmise" and "espy"
your rhyme works here...fits...the words add to the poem subtly, rather than drawing attention because of the rhyming effect.
Nicely done...
and expressing such hope that dreams can come true.
j.

[Wondering Mind]

Thank you Jacob. I appreciate your encouragement and feedback

[Eilis]

I admire the fact that you have kept your poems up on the site for so long. It's almost like a time capsule to encounter poems that have been here beyond a few years because sites like this change so frequently.

As for the poem, it has an airy feel that is appealing. The phoenix is a powerful symbol and it's always interesting to see how each person translates the idea into words. I think a rondel is a lovely approach because it creates boundaries and the repetition creates space for the ideas to develop deeper in the mind. The repetition becomes almost like the beat of wings as the Phoenix soars.

Nice work.

[Wondering Mind]

Thank you for your in-depth review. Your perception is admirable and your effort is much appreciated.
Thanks again.

[Poetic Beauty]

This poem is brilliant in the way it flows and the images that are allowed to flow through my mind. Like a Phoenix many times in our lives we have to rise again. This is breath taking and wise.

[Linear]

Thats a poem, a poem of great merit written in the style of the old masters.

Brilliant

[JelliFyshKissUs]

*clapping* Bravo to you, my friend. Your hope flies high.

[Rick Puetter]

Dear Wondering Mind,

The image of the Phoenix is so powerful. It is a symbol of the undefeatable spirit and soul. It is a symbol of power. This is captured well in your line

"Worries to wane and hope to rise"

How everyone wishes that for their lives. And that is the power of the Phoenix. If we believe in this, we can overcome almost all obstacles because we believe no defeat is final.

Wonderful poem. Greatly enjoyed.

Best regards,

Rick

[Norma M Sutton]

This is lovely.

[ForTheWorld]

lovely, great poem..the best, I think if this will turn into a song, this will make up a beautiful, very beautiful song... =D

[Bubo]

To be strong like the Phoenix, and fly, leaving behind all hindrance of our world to enter a better place, an uplifting piece.

[Ed Hart]

what would we do without the image of phoenix; it must be the symbol of the archetype of our soul