Shadows

My glass has out drunk this bottle

Shadows shimmy across the wall

Life like laminations of lifelessness

Funny how the flicker of a candle

Flirts with the imagination!

And I want more

to drink more delusion

Drown deeper in this dizziness

Dance

Before my candle burns out.

Before they stop

Those shimmy shadows on the wall

Reviews

[What happened to simple..]

love the alliteration, it suits the writing well. Makes it symmetrical of sorts. I love the candle, flirting with the imagination.. sexual fire.. lol =) great writing

[Ed Hart]

unlike existence, bottles run dry

[Norma M Sutton]

The imagery in this is great.

[TAO]

I've been feeling that every few hours for some reason. No idea why. This poem makes me want to set up a desk in a room with no electricity, light some candles, and see what I come up with. Awesome work.

[paul]

brilliant first line
and third

great poem.

[emmah]

- oh there are some really great images your words conjure here - and i agree with james - the alliteration is praiseworthy - for me - the even more fascinating aspect of your poem is how it speaks directly to the reader - and that last stanza - is breathtaking!! beautiful, vivid and delicate!

[James Paulin]

Alliteration is the fascination of this poem and I like it. Like a presentation firearm engraved with filigree, the attention is somewhat focused on the craftsmanship rather than the purpose but I am a detail lover. Quality is always worth analysis.