Tonight (My Exodus Ends)

 

Strum gently, sweet love

On the strings of my heart

Play Cupid’s cunning tunes

With Kama’s crafty art

 

Serenade me subtle songs

Whisper to my longing ears

Let love live this moment

Forget tomorrow and yesteryears

 

Tonight, my exodus ends

At the gates of Eden I stand

And bow in humble gratitude

As I enter my promised land

Reviews

[Janiese Wesley]

I loved it. It was exciting and romantic. The words, "Gates of Eden" caught my attention. I love the Bible, and the Garden of Eden was and still is a beautiful place.

[ForTheWorld]

nice poem, great write bro hahahahah...i just love it

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. oh, how amazing this would sound when recited ... your words are immensely consuming ... and so perfect ... sheer magic with love ... and sheer romance with poetry ... beautiful ...

[Ed Hart]

The Rubaiyat of a Wondering Mind

[Anita B Jacques]

awesome, so glad I found it, dream like....the best part of the living, the promised land, thank you for sharing a great poem.

[Ahmad Alhour]

Let me guess: It has been written as a farewell...
Although, I like it... truly...

[Legion]

:) I think this would be even more beautiful with a strumming guitar playing along with it (or perhaps a lyre). A couple of questions though, did you mean Karma? If not, what is Kama?

[Hanan_Maliah]

...what an intimate write...subtle with a delicate hand leading the pathway to paradise! there are two ways to view this poem...I believe I'll take that of intimacy this time!

[Lady leah]

Very lovely n O so true write for when we stand at the gate n enter the promised land god shall be there to see us through.

[Sheila Kline]

When we shall stand at the gate of Eden, ready to enter The Promised Land, what majesty we shall see. As we each make our exodus of life, we shall each experience different pathways of emotion, yet we shall all have the opportunity to stand at the gate of Eden, with the memory of Cupid's cunning tunes sounding in winds of the past!
Beautiful!!
Sheila