Sadness Looms

A Triolet ABa AabAB

 

Gray sadness on mankind looms

And forsaken peace ponders its fate

A flower fading before it blooms

 

Gray sadness on mankind looms

 

Love left to burn out ; ashes and fumes

Greed and hunger; horrid war and hate

 

Gray sadness on mankind looms

And forsaken peace ponders its fate

Reviews

[Rick Puetter]

Dear Wondering Mind,

A harsh and accurate condemnation of Man's failings. Why, oh why, do we let anger and fear dominate our doings? Through this poem I feal the pain and the desperate longing for change. It is a recognition of our petty impulses.

Well penned, my friend!

Best regards,

Rick

[Everchanging Disaster]

An original rhyme scheme coupled with the repitition of the focus thought and a profound insight makes for a breathtaking read! Thanks for sharing.

[Last Lying Look]

This was beautiful! This is peaceful in a sad, honest way. I really loved the emotion in it.
Excellent work.
Thanks for taking the time to write & add this poem.

-Elissa :)

[poet2angels (lynda)]

Beautifully sad and such meaning behind the words....
Your poetry is always a pleasure to read...

Lynda

[Angel Baby]

This is one powerful and excellent write. Your words speak volumes to those who read this, bring tears to the eyes as well....Well done! PW