Perchance

My goodbye

 

Though fate forced fortune to falter

And forever’s fire fade and subdue

 

Perchance past promise now departed

Breathes love’s lilies and lives anew

 

Though now your supple heart, it sways

To sweet serenades of someone new

 

No heavy hatred burdens my heart

And with well wishes I say adieu

 

May your meadows be forever green

Ardent sun shines your skies blue

 

May your spirit for always dance with joy

And true love your heart accrue

Reviews

[M. Amphet Salt]

Very beautiful and positive. Good-byes are sometimes not so easy, but ironically this one does very well in saying I love you but I quess it wasn't supposed to be and I wish you the best.

The imagery is outstanding.
"May your meadows be forever green
Ardent sun shines your skies blue"

As well as the all the metaphors within in the prose. Speaks true to the heart and relatable in every way that is natural and acceptable.

[TTBoy28]

Very nice! Sweet depiction of one's goodbye!

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. oh gosh ... how benign and benevolent ... i am absolutely incapable of this inherent goodness ... and hence ... such exquisite poetry too ... :) ...

[~angelalala~]

wow this is a beautiful, powerful poem. i love the imagery in this with lines such as "may your meadows be forever green Ardent sunshine your blue skies". a wonderful write to the act of letting go of someone through death or simply the end of the relationship. wonderful write & read.

[Dalaina Renee]

Wonderfully written! Thanks for sharing friend!

[Wicked]

sad write but yet handle with taste to make it beautiful as well, well written.

[J]

Oh but this does twix a heart which knows a good bye is tarnished by broken stems and windows fogged with sighs of regret and loss unbound. The decided Celtic lilt of this piece does lighten the deceptive good will perchance, but not lost is the broken heart stuttering in grieving defeat.

A truly heartfelt and loving disclosure, wm. God bless you.
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[PasDeChat]

Very nice, thank you for sharing. It flows and only wishes well for the future.. very well done!

[Girlintheworld]

Smoothly flowing alliteration throughout with vivid imagery. Lovely read :)

[Dani California]

Somehow you've managed to make "good-bye" a lovely word, yet there is still a hint of sadness creeping up between the lines somewhere. I've always said that if you really truly love someone, you only wish them well, even if their "well" isn't exactly the way you want it. This piece confirms that thought.

Wonderful imagery and meter... a very well written piece.

Lovely!

[Seracies]

I loved the imagery, as well as the alliteration throughout the poem. Loved the first line. Beautiful.