I Promised

 

Promises I’ve seen flow abundantly

in prose and much poetic rhyme

of flashy floral fantasies

and “love” till the end of time

 

But too soon did I discover

how weak these were to the test

so decided with the modest self

not to embroider like the rest

 

No promise was made of Eden

or wild wanderings where whim wills

no stardust form your favorite star

or aimless walks on faraway hills

 

Our love was born sure and true

so my promise was as pure as can be

with heart and soul I vowed to you

and humbly I promised you me

Reviews

[SpokenWord]

You hit this right from the first paragraph and you never looked back. Very nice flow and the read was amazing. I like the simple promise they are easier to keep than the grander ones.

[Ed Hart]

ah yes, that's about as sweet as it comes

[Inkcognito]

"...humbly I promised you me" ...that is simply beautiful!

[James Paulin]

One suggestion, change "so my promise was as true as can be " to so my promise was as pure as can be . I love this simple commitment poem.

[poet2angels (lynda)]

Nothing better than straight from the heart, my friend
There is something to be said of honesty...I have learned that lesson well :)
Excellent piece

Lynda

[After the Blackbird Sin..]

Love with peasant bones. Very nice. Alliteration too. Not enough imagery though.