C

I dance to the key of C

It’s natural, and in nature

and with nature I dance

you see

deep, blue, an Equinox

I doubt  you see

how I dance to

the key of C

Reviews

[H L Rose]

I enjoyed the read. My thoughts are below. I like to get into the weeds and when a short poem offers so much to consider, I cannot pass up the opportunity to dissect it. But I am no expert so take or leave any of my comments!

"I dance to the key of C"

This a great first line that offers a question that the reader wishes to keep reading to answer "What does it mean to dance to the key of C?". I also enjoy the rhythm of it. With the word choice of "dance" and "key" it only makes sense the line would have a good rhythm.

"It’s natural, and in nature"

The alliteration is great but I also like how you chose to end the line. The pause causes the reader to contemplate which sets the tone that "nature" is important to the meaning here.

"and with nature I dance"

I like the idea of both "in nature" and "with nature". I do however question the use of both "nature" and "dance" twice in such a short poem. But repetition isn't always a bad thing!

"you see"

I like the intrigue and suspense of giving these two words a line to themselves.

"deep, blue, an Equinox"

This line is the most evoking stand-alone line besides the first line. It evokes the clearest imagery in the poem. The suggestion of equality (perhaps with light and dark) with "Equinox", but also the choice to use a capital "E" makes me assume this line is quite important to understanding the poem as a whole.

"I doubt you see"

We see more repetition here but I quite like it. The speaker of the poem is suggesting that what is not being "[seen]" is perhaps personal, nuanced, or in some way difficult for others (or the one the poem is directed to) to see. But important to the overall point.

"how I dance to"
"the key of C"

I like the dunad in this poem. It holds enough of a question to be intruiging no matter how many times the reader reads it. By sandwiching the poem with this line the speaker is suggesting that they have revealed something about the answer to the reader's initial question of "What does it mean to dance to the key of C?".

In a way the poem does feel like it is lacking because the initial and ending line is so intriguing and the rest of the poem doesn't seem to match the intrigue enough as it is. It feels like there is more to be said. That being said this poem gives the reader a lot to think about and discover. I enjoyed reading it! Thank you for posting!

[Wondering Mind]

To start, I thank you so much for taking time to read this.
In all honesty, I am flabbergasted at your depth of perception.. you must be proficient in reading minds or when the between the lines are more than the lines
Thanks again

[H L Rose]

Of course! Thanks, I’m glad you appreciated the review!

[Ken Simm.]

Excellent, more than a ditty. More a collection of intelligent whimsy.

[W. Barrett Munn]

I like how you structured this poem, and doubling up on “nature” in and with works well.

Winston

[Pax]

C, I wonder, interesting and intriguing, I am not musically inclined but I can tell the c keys is where we start to dance and get into it, feeling every rhythm...

[Sami Khalil]

A very fine poem about music and musical in one.
Short, powerful and enjoyable.
You don't waste any thought.

[Lorry]

I dance too, but only when all windows and doors are locked and I have no idea what key, but if it's anything like my singing in the shower, it will be the key that starts the car that's moving as far away from the din I'm making, at warp speed! 😊
Yours looks and sounds much better though in my mind, where you attract an audience and not a stampede for the door and a wish you were deaf! 😊
Your deep blue and equinox line has taken me to the beach at sunset, where you slowly turn into a silhouette, moving in tempo with the sound of the sea and cool breeze blowing, as you dance slowly to the rhythm of nature.
Your words doth paint an awesome picture!

[willweb]

Funny, it seems the entire musical world revolves around the key of C or at least the key C. When taking piano lessons the very first thing I can remember being taught was where Middle C was located on the keyboard. So, my assumption is that all dance as well began in the key of C so, I can see that you would dance in C. Very cool poem, I enjoyed this.

[Renée]

Greetings, Your, Bluesy-ness ( ;
You are always full of surprises!
Perhaps I can’t C, perhaps I can C… eh lol
Nice, vintage, choice!

[Chris Shaw]

This little poem brought me imagery and happiness. I saw middle C on the piano bring depressed before the dancing started. Whether music, dance or poetry, they are all creative outlets which I see in such a positive light. Thank you fir posting.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

being one who danced since he came out of the womb...I do see...and appreciate.
j.