Like the Moon

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have you ever
lost all sense of time
and space
but your senses very aware?

 

 

this isn’t a dream
yet none of it is real-ly
possible

like the moon

you shouldn’t be here

and I
shouldn’t be able to raise my flag
and penetrate your terrain

it would be a sad non-reality
if
passion was a conspiracy

Reviews

[Mockingbird]

the world is different when you lose space and time and senses fully aware. it is a surreal experience. everything just makes sense.

[Circe]

this was frightening how accurately you're able to describe that subconscious part of you that looks inside itself and finds those moments you're talking about.. those where you're actually able to travel through someone's mind, a totally unreal communication channel.. and that passion to discover more, struggling with a sense of paranoia that seems to invade with more knowledge... another intricate, cerebral piece.

[Corset]

hey, you stole my lines! jk..but yes, I seem to do a lot of that lately actually it's how I write most of my poems that don't make any sense :) oh hush some of them do make sense!

[Pax]

i can't help but answers hope you don't mind. ;)

have you ever lost all sense of time and space but your senses very aware?
it only happens in my dreams, i think? :)

this isn’t a dream yet none of it is real-ly possible
if we believe it can, then it can be right? :)
imagination is a vast space.. ;D

passion was a conspiracy, just maybe or not totally or just never thought about it :D

[Wondering Mind]

well, Willyam, I can only answer from personal experience...I have lost all sense of time and space without losing senses ( in some ways I care not to share in public)...
second: I believe that impossible is nothing, all one has to do is control the fears of the mind
third: not all conspiracy is bad, but if passion was planned, it would be sad

[Helen Crutchett]

I answer affirmative for the first stanza. Second stanza,and yes, it isn't a dream....and I do think it is possible. Yes the moon should be here....it has a right!
And frankly I don't know what I'm talking about W.M. But it struck a chord inside me like I have been there too. Make of it what you will, its getting late and I am probably talking gobbledegook! Helena :)

[Wondering Mind]

lol...well thanks you for taking time to read and leave your thoughts, both are highly appreciated.... the Moon is a mystery, without it, life on Earth as we know whould never have existed, yet by "scientific knowledge" it shouldn't be there... :)

[Helen Crutchett]

Really? The moon shouldn't be there? I wonder why.....perhaps you could enlighten me more?? Have a beautiful day....Helena :)

[Sam Gregory]

Hard to decide how to say what I want to say about this. I like it, the structure looked weird at first but if flows well. The message can be taken in a few ways depending on ur view too, keep at it :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Like the moon is magical, words can make you lose your sense of time and space...it can take you to a surreal place.... where passion isn't a conspiracy, but another world...a heavenly realm.

[Wondering Mind]

I think that's why we're told it's poetry, Robbie. Thanks for reading :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

lol You forgot about books and stories too. :P

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maybe not a conspiracy but i think it's a shooting star :P

[Wondering Mind]

Ah yes, like the one I witnessed the other night...across the desert sky :)