oceans flames turn to hands

the oceans waves ripple
as they burn to flames
of a burning heart
full of deep ambition
the fires flames
burn to hands
of those in despair
of failure out of ambitions
or you can burn with the ambition
to always win
but you may fail
and fall
into the pits of despair
of the life that people have sinned
is where the sinners of the 7
deadly sins were born

Author's Note

first real deep poem ive made so feel free to make comments on my grammar and corrections i nee to fix

Reviews

[revenant21]

It's a good poem, with a good outline to it, but you may want to work a little on the rhythm so it flows a little easier. There are some lines where it gets confusing with all the "of" 's, so that's something you may want to look into. The last few lines are good, but they get a little hard to understand. But, those are just my suggestions, take them or leave them. Good poem, good job! Keep on writing!