Look to the simple things in life to offer joy and hope when there is darkness. I like that the light from the snow tipped mountain travels down to the valley's depths. That is both beautiful in its imagery, but also its meaning. Lovely work CD.
Chris
Posted 4 Years Ago
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4 Years Ago
Thanks Chris. I appreciate you taking a look. That's a lot of nice comments from you.
No way!!! I opened the poem and the first thing my eyes saw was this,
" I desire only simplicity."
Was it You or someone else who I was telling (I tell this always but I am speaking recently). That I love SIMPLICITY and clarity in poetry? (yes and I seem to be terrible in them). now excuse me after I made this intercept going to read your poem and leave a decent review.
Read.
Seriously, why You are hiding this beautiful reality of your soul? ( I don't know from where I got that You hide it, probably I am wrong). in short, I can feel when it's a soul that's writing, and You write with your soul. You yearn for something that You may have never met or known before, but You feel it, your soul feels it.... This is so special, exceptional....
Posted 2 Years Ago
2 Years Ago
B.T.W, considering your first verse, the snow, peak and mountain, again, I also used it before in on.. read moreB.T.W, considering your first verse, the snow, peak and mountain, again, I also used it before in one of my poems. If You are interested I can share it with You.
2 Years Ago
Yeah. I sit down. Come up with a line, or two, try to feel the direction im being pulled toward an.. read moreYeah. I sit down. Come up with a line, or two, try to feel the direction im being pulled toward and lean that way.. Think about if I want to commit to some type of meter, rhyme scheme. Look over, ask the ghost of Wendell Berry if its ok proceed, (he's not dead yet btw), then let the soul take over. You probably know yourself that it doesn't always work as expected. Its uncanny though how well some things work when the poet gods are swimming against the current in your brain. Lightning. Right? Anyway.....yes im interested. Do you have it here on WC?
Sorry but my mind feels foreign to some of your words at this moment lol probably my mind's God are .. read moreSorry but my mind feels foreign to some of your words at this moment lol probably my mind's God are flowing against the flow. Anyway, Thank You for being interested, here is the link,
Oh hey, forgot to say that I liked your review a lot. Got distracted commenting on the soul being p.. read moreOh hey, forgot to say that I liked your review a lot. Got distracted commenting on the soul being part of the writing process. Ill check out that poem asap.
2 Years Ago
You weren't distracted for me :> Thank You, and You are so welcome 🌞
If we find true love, fortunately I have, and can raise a family, be loved by those we seek to share our lives with them this life of ours is one to be cherished.
Great use of words, imagery in this piece.
Well done you sir😎
Toward the end, I'm reading this as the narrator speaking to God. I love that it's expressed conversationally, rather than using some stilted biz. This sounds like how I talk to God, like He's right here with me, catching me in my real words. I also love the message of simplicity, since I have been moving in this direction for years, since moving to the wilderness, becoming more in tune with the land & creatures, instead of the frenzy of stuff so many people find to swirl around about. As always, your way of stating relatable concepts always sparkles with originality (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
I feel like these days people are so wrapped up in the struggles of their lives that they fail to stop and appreciate the small and simple things that make life what it is. Thanks for sharing this!
it is so easy to overthink things when one has an analytical mind particularly when we author of or in introspection we well at least I have many a day looked for the complex answer and stepped right over the simple ones... thinking hey that's to easy perhaps it is indicative of western philosophy why walk around the mountain when we can tunnel thru it lol
and to experience love before death...simple wants and wishes...
what more do we really need?
we have complicated life too much...we no longer feel that "fist on a stone"--
j.
Posted 4 Years Ago
4 Years Ago
Thanks Jacob. Sorry for the late reply. I hope you're doing well.