Sonnet

Quick sonnet knocked up to prove to my sister that they weren't too difficult to write, when she was struggling to write one for her assignment

Shall I compare thee to a stinking drain

Perhaps a rather fousty piece of cheese

In photographs we leave you out the frame

And steer well clear of you for fear of fleas

The stench of you truly offends my nose

The sight is one born only by blank eyes

I’d love to wash you down with garden hose

But fear I must leave that to open skies

The heavens must awake and do their job

The gods undo the wrongs that they create

Else into craters, men like you they lob

And leave the so-called monsters to their fate

And time and fire will rid you from this place

‘til all, once more, have smiles upon their face

Reviews

[Mauricio Montoya]

I'd hate to be the person this intended for I'll say one thing you're not holding anything back. Nice work getting your point a cross.

[wizzawiz]

Thanks guys :-)
No genuine dislike behind this one (that i recall, anyway!) - sister's challenge was to write a non-romantic sonnet or something along those lines, and this is just what I came up with. Not used to working within a strict format so was an interesting one, but I'm pretty pleased with it!

[DeViouS]

Well written sonnet. I guess you don'tlike this person then?? . . :)
Have you read my bird sonnet yet? It is a bit cleaner than yours.
`Shall I compare thee to a stinking drain
Perhaps a rather fousty piece of cheese'
This is soo descriptive - great!

[Mr. Morgenstern]

This is a good sonnet. You should check out my sonnet. It's not quite as good but still pretty funny.

[Frank F. Atanacio]

the imagery, and word usage--Fantastic I enjoyed this little piece :)