knocking on heavens door

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Knocking on heavens door

 

 

i was lonely down  and broken hearted,

 

 

Losing in love before I even got started,

 

 

Walking, thinking, about what went wrong,

 

 

Why me I can't take no-more,

 

 

Ended up knocking on heavens door,

 

 

Knock! Knock! Knock!

 

 

Knocking on heavens door,

 

 

A sweet angel opened up,

 

 

Not a word she spoke,

 

 

Yet I felt she  sensed my hurt,

 

 

Took me in her arms,

 

 

Kissed me soft and long,

 

 

As I surrender to her heavenly charms,

 

 

 

Her wings enfolded me,

 

 

 And set my hurt free,

 

 

She said wizthom I understand,

 

 

Don’t worry I'll ease the pain,

 

 

She was so beautiful, sweet brown sugar,

 

 

Her kisses tasted like honey,

 

 

 Fresh as the morning dew,

 

 

She led me to a bed of roses,

 

 

Laid me down and whispered,

 

 

You give so much of yourself,

 

 

Running on empty there's nothing left,

 

 

So I will refill you,

 

 

 

 Give you love,

 

 

 That so brand new,

 

 

Mm mm,her body on top of mines,

 

 

Made my nature rise,

 

 

She said, its okay,

 

 

 

I'm here to serve you in a heavenly way,

 

 

as she planted kisses on  my chest ,

 

 

pulsing to suck  on my erect n*****s,

 

 

 

first the left then the right

 

 

that drove me wild needless to say,

 

 

 

by then Thor was jumping ,my desire

 

 

 

had became a raging fire,

 

 

as i exhaled i felt her grab hold ,

 

 

 

of my life force hard and wet,

 

 

as she pumped me  stroked me,

 

 

 i looked down only to see,

 

 

her taking my rod lovingly between her lips,

 

 

as i felt  the warm enfolds of her mouth ,

 

 

 

she gently sucked as she jerk me up and down,

 

 

mmm ooohh  my love ,, i found myself loving this angel,

 

 

 

for i could tell she was loving the taste and feel of me,

 

 

she was moaning,slurping,pumping,licking the crown right down to the under vein,

 

 

 

every minute second she was loving it

 

 

when all of a sudden her body started ,

 

 

 

jerking yes this beautiful angel was having an organism,

 

 

just from the taste of my nature flow,

i--yes i let go,

 

 

see i couldn't hold it no-more,

 

 

i gave her my true essence,after all that's what she wanted,

 

 

i shot hot strong,and long,

 

 

 

but she was draining me faster than i could shoot,

 

 

most men would have been Thu,,no not i ,

 

 

this angel i had to get inside,

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

so i pull her up,kissed her just to lay her down,

 

 

with wide open legs MM what a sight to see,

 

 

a  hot wet streaming honey nest beckoning me to come in,

 

 

and i did,oh yes  i did...

 

 

i give her the best in love,

 

 

with each thrust came a moan,

 

 

with each pull back came loves lotion,

 

 

i was stroking slow deep and hard,

 

 

she was bouncing up to greet me,

 

 

 

love puddles they were flowing,

 

 

as Ecstasy came calling,

 

 

i shouted oh my angel ,

 

 

you ,you make a man feel so good,

 

 

 

as she moaned wizthom,

 

 

don't stop i want it allllllll,

 

 

time stopped ,we were in a zone,

 

 

where good feeling goes on and on,

 

 

sweat ,heat,wetness,equivocalness,

 

 

we became one in union,

 

 

one in passion,one in affection..

 

 

 

 

 

LOVE IS THE FORCE ,THAT RULES US ALL,,

Author's Note

mm erotic sweet angel

Reviews

[Enigmatic Amor]

Yes, quite erotic to be sure. More in the way of cyber sex, to my thought.

The beginning started quite nicely and did not make me think of an erotic poem. At first I thought it was something else.

One thing I noticed was that you used some lines from songs, was that intentional? I think that could be incorporated well if done right. Perhaps those lines in quotations...something to set them apart from your writing. It does add a certain dimension to the piece.

Thank you for sharing my friend.

[bluessadmood]

wow that was so nice exotic ,exciting write ,very nice,yes love would take us to wild imagination ,these moments of love you lose sense of time,and gives you wild feeling of joy and endless happiness

[lilain]

Me, oh, my! Phew. This one read fast, fast, then faster as, well, ahem... OK, I'll get back to reviewing instead of mewing. This was delicious. You've got some excellent words for the erotic play - never quite saying it, not needing to. Well done, my friend.

[whispersoftly]

Very erotic indeed....

From the onset I didn't expect it to be an erotic piece....love how it slowly evolved into one....

very sweet write ;-)