The Girl I Left Behind

My friend requested me to write a composition for their band so this is what i ended up. Hopefully they love it.

 

Walking down the street

With nothing else to see

The days gone by so fast

Turning me’ head like s**t

Today I see you once again

Unaccompanied once more

Thought my feet will chase you back

But chances are derisive

 

Ref.

 

Now here we are
Alone in togetherness
Trying to ease each pain

Brought by the other
But even a home
Won't tie us together
When our hearts live alone

And bittersweet memoirs lingers

Chorus:

 

I know I used to use you

Like you are just for show

I know I don’t love you

But I never let you go

And now the days gone mad

And each moment seems to miss

The girl I used to use

Is the girl I love the most

 

Still, I can see you

Despite those flossy clouds

They almost looked like you

Weeping tirelessly for me

Now I hate to imagine

How fate twisted me

Coz’ now I am crying

Just as tears fall down your face

 

(Repeat Ref. then Chorus)

 

Bridge:

 

You, me,
We then,
We are here.
You had so much pain

And I had so much to say

Smiles are worn and out of tune

Only bruise, cruise, and not in tune.

 

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Reviews

[Neve Stone]

I dont want to be the proverbial pain in the arse but it does not feel like it flows. Its like one of those things that get caught in your throat and tumble out all disoriented and confused. The imagry is good but personally not something that would catch my eye. Just remember though, before I ruffle your creative feathers, opinions are like farts...everyone has one..got it? Keep writing. See what more you can hatch.