Mask the Night

i am the absolute worst and grammar and spelling so if you fix any of those it would be great!
I tried to make the wording seem thoughtful and use bigger words. It worked out nicely in the beginning, but it starts to fade as the story goes on, so if you by chance so some nice big words that would be grateful.
really please tell me anything you'd like, whether you hated it, loved it, what ever needs improvement, what should be changed and what should not even happen. I'm trying to make the girl as un-cliche as possible and adventure she gets thrown in to cliche, but the situations different, and weird. In other terms i want the story to be 100% cliche, yet 100% uncliche, makes no sense but that's really how i can explain it. sorry, and please help me