All Shall Fade

All Shall Fade

By Windstorm Kells ©2008

 

One spark trembles

Flames dance animated

Emotions a blazed, boil

Dreams rage with intensity

 

Shape a moment

One instant of time

Eclipse of echoes reveal

Nothing last forever

 

Words sharpen keener then swords

Actions virulent willful of destruction

Deceit overlaying animosity

Truths forgotten on sight

 

Ways of life collapse as grains of sand

Strewed to the four winds

Laughter stained by tears

Crippled, bare, forgotten

 

Mountains crumble from time

Paint fades with each passing sun

Cultures arise in war

Suddenly fall in times of peace

 

Children fight the troubles

Started by their parents

Children of their children rebuild

Only to watch it be destroyed

 

In the end

All shall fade

 

Reviews

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Sorry it took so long to review this. This seems to be my way of thinking these days. Humans just dont seem to understand how much destrcution we have and can do to just about anything. I tend to think that maybe something needs to happen where we would finally snap out of it. Only in a perfect world, I suppose. Awesome write!

[Celtic Cat]

in the end all shall. sometimes we need reminding how destructible we are, while some days it's all painfully obvious. I wonder if we will ever evolve enough to live and let live. Such a simple idea... Sometimes it's good for all to come crashing down, once in a while we need to make room for some new. I like this piece, gives me much to chew on and mull over!

[Brette Medb]

As depressing as this is in many cases it is true... There are so many things throughout time that have once been so strong, steady, and sure to in the end fall or either no reason at all or because someone or something has seeked to destroy it.

[Mr. Misanthrope]

The one thing that attracted me to reading this poem of yours is its title, 'All Shall Fade'. It reminded me of Pippin's Song in the movie The Lord of the Rings: The Return of the King. And being such a huge Tolkien fan, I was drawn to examine this piece.

However, when I read this poem, I was easily distracted, and in all honesty, the only reason I finished it, without any interest whatsoever, was because it wasn't as long as the usual dribble I am requested to read on this site.

I believe that you are expecting too much of your readers. It is obvious that this poem is a collaboration of raw emotions you managed to let out one faithful night. However, the way in which you structured the poem, by stating one or two words and then moving on by means of a comma, makes it very uncomfortable to read all at one go.

I suggest you revise this and edit each stanza. They all contain the basis of an interesting topic; you just need to finish writing it :P Form a 'real' poem, with formal lines, and using the words you have already used in THIS poem to create your final draft. Don't let anyone tell you that a 'real' poem is just a bunch of words you felt and placing them all together, because there is always an underlying structure to it.

Luke:)

[Carrie Montgomery]

this is much too much! WOW! what a whirl-wind of emotion...captures the mind and makes one feel so...melancholy! Great write!

[Steffi]

"Children fight the troubles
Started by their parents
Children of their children rebuild
Only to watch it be destroyed"
I thought this piece was spectacular. It rang so true in the hearts of every person. the lines above were my favorite by far. the fact that past generations leave the issues to be fixed to the children they leave behind only to have the children of those children watch the world their parents tried to fix burn.
Fantastic write.

[Brianna Brie]

Ways of life collapse as grains of sand
Strewed to the four winds
Laughter stained by tears
Crippled, bare, forgotten

My favorite verse is above. Written well with strong words.

[Jet Lag]

my favorite verse:
Children fight the troubles

Started by their parents

Children of their children rebuild

Only to watch it be destroyed

[RHEA CROSLEY]

Insightful lines to the frailty of our situation. Causes the heart to hunger for that which is eternal - a forever refuge.

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

fantastic and so very true...
great write