First off, your name is quite interesting... *pause and applause*
You are someone who says, they just signed up because of friends - nah, disagree, you signed up because you know really deep down, that you have potential for this thing we call writing.
It's bewildering when people have the concept and the creativity to put into their writing, then say they aren't really a writer. Some are just designed to recognize the truth, and you have the ability to craft such things ~ like it or not you are on your way to becoming a writer.
Secondly, I am on board with this concept. You have the ability and desire to change peoples perceptions by shocking them with knowledge they can cause such disasterous things to happen.
You really need to keep your writing up, practice makes perfect... utilize it!
You may want to sweep this one clean (conjunctions - We will be glad to help if need be) and send into Enlightenment contest on Poetic Infusion Society.
Hi's there. This is an awesome poem. Jossy already gave you a well-thought-out, gorgeous (frankly) review, so I'm just going to saw it's incredible, and listen to Jos because she knows what she's doing, and go on my way. LOVES!
Welcome to the Cafe! And of course I will be nice, I'm Jocelyn! Now for the poem itself.
The emotion of this poem was very powerful, something that cannot be faked. I'm not sure if you wrote this before or after reading my poem "I'm Better", but either way this poem is amazing. Just one little suggestion though. A couple of times in this poem you said 'u'. I would suggest changing them to 'you', which is what I'm sure you meant.
Other than that, this was a fantastic piece. Well done!
~Aurora
so theres this fancy smancy little about me thingy on here that i have absolutly no idea what to write on sooo im just going to ramble and ramble because thats what i do best.....
P.S. if you spam me.. more..