Broken Memories

at last a poem which inspired by my bad memories that keeps on appearing recently.

 

Broken parts of my old days

Shattered me, fragments of the past reflects the old me

Memories appeared as sudden as time passed

I wish it will just fade away to nothingness

never showing, never emerging

You’re the memory I wish to forget

to stay blank and clean to start a new one

Yet I see it as clear as the bright blue sky

Pointing itself towards me

showing me, giving me

A chance that I can be better than the past

Author's Note

Revised something ~

Sometimes memories emerge when we think deep or have seen something that will trigger it. Before i said that i will forget all of my past, because its such a pain to remember, so in result i forgot all of my childhood days, also the good ones. But then they will just appear reminding us what we were, so i think i never did forgot all the bad memories, the good once were just lost somewhere in the sands of time. Now i realized that bad memories are very much hard to forget. But if we look at the bright side, it perfectly reminds us that we can become better at it because we have learned the fault and can avoid it or even solve its riddles.

all in all memories shapes us to become the better us of today.
in terms of amnesia there still the heart and body that will reminds us even our mind forgets.

I talk to much, about the poem, but then again i just needed a release...from the bad memories.

Credits goes to the image by:
oo-rein-oo
he have done a great job in taking these concept that brings image to my poem.

Reviews

[GunMetal]

Using "just" twice in the fourth line weakens the statement there. Otherwise this was an excellent write.
"Showing me
Giving me
A chance that I can be better than the past" - Great ending. Sometimes we can't forget the past, but we can start learning to let it go.

[Pax]

thanks, i never noticed that...I'll fix that.

[Laura Maidah]

Mirroring my old self? Very vernal in the rest of the gesture of the piece. The last line, same goes.

[Pax]

thanks for the advice, I'll try revising this.

[Brittany]

I totally get this. And good job putting it into words. Keeping writing.

[Arik]

I really like this poem, I find it's premise of how the memories that haunt us can be what makes us strive to better ourselves. It's very easy to relate to.

[Celestial Witch Child]

I recommend revising the usage of old in the first two lines. Also mirroring and shattered mirrors. It gives the poem a sense of redundancy. Overall a worthy piece.

[Pax]

thanks for the advice, I'll try revising this.

[MOON]

Memories can be a blessing and a curse. Poignant lovely write.

[Pax]

This is beautiful. I so feel your words. Without the past, there is no future, for every good and bad is strength to another piece of your upcomming life. I like the motto, and the poem is well written. Good work my friend.

E.L.

[Pax]

thank you my friend, i never knew it can be a motto...i wrote this to remind m and like you said its my strength to go on..and that's life..thank you again for such a wonderful reflection in my poem.

Always welcome, I love your work!

[Kiari Sabon]

I loved this the write and the notes its true and i try to forget my past 2 but it never lasts long it all comes back to me in my dreams every night..... but may your wounds heal

[Pax]

thank you, my wounds are healed as i aged so they are just memories now. and ive learned from it like everyone does.

[Michael X]

memories, past, future, does any of it actually exist except in the mind?
I believe if one focuses on the actuality of the now, then all else is
realized as it is, a thought. The idea you bring to life here is heartfelt
raw, and absolutely truthful, thought is who we are. excellent job

[Pax]

i believed that memories and the past are just brothers they are interconnected with each others that exist in our minds or things like photos. the future i considered it a dream/a wishful thinking of what we gonna become someday, though i dont think about it much(just broken dreams). and i also focus on what is now, living in the present. Thank u my friend, your reviews are really insightful.

[Layla J Omorose]

Beautiful poem. I often feel the same way myself. but eventually we have to let them go. Great write

[Cole Hayley]

"You're the memory I wish to forget", beautiful. I love this piece, its the first piece i've read by you and i will be sure to read more.