Broken Memories

at last a poem which inspired by my bad memories that keeps on appearing recently.

 

Broken parts of my old days

Shattered me, fragments of the past reflects the old me

Memories appeared as sudden as time passed

I wish it will just fade away to nothingness

never showing, never emerging

You’re the memory I wish to forget

to stay blank and clean to start a new one

Yet I see it as clear as the bright blue sky

Pointing itself towards me

showing me, giving me

A chance that I can be better than the past

Author's Note

Revised something ~

Sometimes memories emerge when we think deep or have seen something that will trigger it. Before i said that i will forget all of my past, because its such a pain to remember, so in result i forgot all of my childhood days, also the good ones. But then they will just appear reminding us what we were, so i think i never did forgot all the bad memories, the good once were just lost somewhere in the sands of time. Now i realized that bad memories are very much hard to forget. But if we look at the bright side, it perfectly reminds us that we can become better at it because we have learned the fault and can avoid it or even solve its riddles.

all in all memories shapes us to become the better us of today.
in terms of amnesia there still the heart and body that will reminds us even our mind forgets.

I talk to much, about the poem, but then again i just needed a release...from the bad memories.

Credits goes to the image by:
oo-rein-oo
he have done a great job in taking these concept that brings image to my poem.

Reviews

[GunMetal]

Using "just" twice in the fourth line weakens the statement there. Otherwise this was an excellent write.
"Showing me
Giving me
A chance that I can be better than the past" - Great ending. Sometimes we can't forget the past, but we can start learning to let it go.

[Pax]

thanks, i never noticed that...I'll fix that.

[Inspiring Writer]

Well said through this poem about memories, about past.... I felt your this write because sometimes me too become lost into my past and write something about memories which's further helps me to recover from my past and move on making the future bright :) I liked this piece you made from the heart. Keep writing :)

[Pax]

thank you my friend... I am glad you can relate to this piece... your as much as a positive thinker than i am... :)

[one sky]

I like this piece, my friend. I hope like you I could move on. By that time, I will wear many flowers as my crown. LOL. I'm happy at this moment. Perhaps a start of taking the bright path? I hope so.

This is a splendid piece. I learned a lot especially the author's note.LOL
Thank you for the recent inspiring articles from you.

[Pax]

thank you ms. Marguerite, I find it hard to pronounce(the name) LOL... anyways I am glad you have learned something from this old piece, sometimes when I remembered something I often reflect on this piece as a reminder... and that is also why i re-published this... this piece hold something special to me... thank you again!

[one sky]

You're welcome. Please keep on writing inspiring pieces. More power to you!

[BlackRose]

They say the same to me Pax, to keep doing what I'm doing, that is writing. I have been on here for a awhile since last year too. This was a FAAANTASTIC piece. As is your others I have read. And yes as I probably said before to you, keep writing.

[Pax]

thank you my friend... how have you been... hope your doing well my friend...

[BlackRose]

Doing good as always. Facing my challenges as they come and hope for better or good outcomes. And how are you? I hope all is well with you too.

[Pax]

just ok, weary but bearable... are there result? hope its for good outcomes...

[BlackRose]

Not yet for those I'm still waiting on. But I know that in due time there will be. I don't give up in my pursuits. And to you, why ok??? I hope you or things get better soon. I don't want you to feel that way but to be well and keep writing great pieces.

[Pax]

i hope so too.... thanks...

[BlackRose]

Your very welcome. :o)

[Devanshu Rajput]

i was trying to find your old pieces of writing and i found this beautiful piece.....is this your first piece on WC?

[Pax]

thanks my friend.... i had unpublished my first few pieces... 'inlove' ~ that's my first piece in wc.... i started here in wc last year april... and until now I'm still here... it's been rewarding journey for me in terms of expressing my thoughts... I am grateful you are reading my works...

[Devanshu Rajput]

i am reading because i want to be a writer like you....

[Pax]

wow... that's really nice to hear... everyone has a great sides within us... listen to your heart and soul... we have a long road my friend... like the advice my friends give me... write write write... and read as much as possible.... and with that we are on the way to that road.... keep writing...

[Ency Bearis]

Well narrated thoughts and pleasure to read. I can relate to this sentiments.

[Pax]

thank you kabayan... its a pleasure to hear your views on it...

[Maan]

Pretty decent but I've an issue with this as from every in which poet express himself as one who wants to forget. I don't get it why you are writing about it if you really want to forget the past. I know its not easy to get over the past, sometimes it is just simply impossible to do that but by writing about or expressing your past in your poem can't help you any ways. No doubt the poem is written very nicely, I like second half which is representing a positivity. Nice write, keep writing and keep sharing. :)

[Pax]

thank you, Yup me too i like the ending part..it really show the positive side.

[Barbara Walker]

This poem shows an optimism, as it tries to forget a pessimistic past. Good write!

[Leslie Philibert]

I like this, you write well. Just maybe a few points.
The image of a shattered mirror is not new, and the repeat in the second line (noun and verb) weaken it a bit, maybe reflect my old self might be better, and I would edit dust in the wind, a cliche, try to work in another line. But all in all a good write.

[Renée]

You express this well...I understand about losing good memories due to blocking bad...it is life eh?