Chapter 1: Moments of Goodbye

a letter to my love ones

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Do you remember the time I stole your diary?
I remember the time I first found out about its context.
The love I never knew you have for my brother.
I was so jealous at first.
But as I read through each page down to the last one.
I've realized I have done a lot of things you got tired of.
My brother was always there when we have a huge fight.
It happened time to time in every pages of the diary.
The first few pages were great.
It showed affection in our first date.
I've read our first fight.
A misunderstanding that almost broke your heart.
But we coped up with the differences in our personalities.
Yet it is still the issue.
I therefore conclude that, I was the one.
The only one who broke your heart into tiny pieces!
And it was my brother who put it back each time I broke it again and again.
Now I see how you love him as much as I am.
Now I see how much you protected him from me.
Now I see how you would do anything for him.

It was my mistake.

My brother loves me so much that he said nothing.
He even said he doesn't love you just for my own sake of happiness.
From that you had been fighting me ever since, that I drive my brother away from us.
You've been avoiding me and his been avoiding you.
But still we've meet each others like civilized people.
I felt sick of the entire charade.
That I  felt like I was the main obstacle in this love story.
I don't want that anymore.
I love the two of you so much that I can't endure the pain you two carry.
That's why I decided to go get a job abroad.
So that the two of my beloved people will be happy.

I hope you will take care of my brother, my past love.
He's all I got left from our family that had passed away.
It's been the two of us since the tragic accident of our parents.
I'm so sorry for all the pain I cause.
Just remember me as the one who love you that had to go away.

And for you my beloved brother, I'm sorry also.
I know it's been hard.
You've been very obedient, kind and caring like I tough you so.
I don't want you to be unhappy in you life.
I felt your sadness when our parents died.
Now I felt you sorrow for just being kind.
I don't want that, I've manage yours and my life alone with little problems.
Mine alone will not be problem, so you don't have to worry about me.

It's hard to say goodbye.
Hoping that when I leave the country, this will set the both of you free.
Free to love each other.
I don't want the two of you to stop me.
It's my choice.
Getting it all out, feels great.
Felt relieved of all the pain and sorrow.
Free from the chains I've created.
I leave this house to the two of you.
This will be my future wedding gift.
I hope you two can work things right this time now that I'm not around.

Be happy guys..

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As the taxi drove out the gate, I've looked back to see something to hold on into.
I was happy and contented of what I've seen.
The two of them standing next to each other and eyeing themselves intently.
A kiss of passion broke their long silence.
That some memory to remember.

A smile broke free from my chained lips from far too long of pain.

Goodbye my good and bad memories.
I've learned a lot from you.
Now I can start all over again.
To start somewhere free to do anything I want to.
Living life to the fullest will not be impossible anymore.

Reviews

[Horizon K.]

Wow, amazing! There was so much emotion expressed and I felt every bit if it, the despair at learning his gf loves his brother and realization of his own flaws from her eyes, knowing you are in the way of the happiness of the two you love the most, and this brave selflessness, this lack of bitterness or reverberant jealousy at letting them both go to be together... I love this character already...

[Pax]

sorry for the late reply my friend... you put a big smiles to me face my friend... your words is truly appreciated... it started as a poem that becomes a continous story... I am glad... I will see you soon when you get back...

[Wendy Seames Garner]

Very nice, Willyam, filled with conflict, love and sadness! You have a little editing to do, I think because English isn't your main language. No way I could write this well in another language.

[JadeForever]

I loved this a lot..^.^ Its going into my library..it was so heart-felt and well done. There was one thing about it I didnt enjoy though. I felt like the title should be A Letter to My Loved Ones. But other then that..BRAVO! your a talented writer

[Renée]

This is a chapter that is so rich with love...heart wrenching..but the love makes it bearable ..

[AK]

Amazing chapter! I love the way you choose to depict a story with the help of a poem. A tale of two brothers...very intriguing. The emotions and tension was expressed very well, loved it! Keep writing!

[Layla J Omorose]

I liked this, it was really good and actually read more like a really long poem. The issue that I have is that you confuse the tenses by switching between past and present tense very often. Make sure when you pick a tense you stick with it. Because of your tense shifts you used a lot of the wrong wording in the story. Try reading this out loud to yourself to see if it sounds right to your ear. But other than that I look forward to the next chapter.

[Romero Calderon]

Good job. This is pretty intense. It would make a great play or movie. Keep developing it. I like the format too. a poetic novel?

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing chapter. I like how the one brother learn to understand his mistake and accepted the truth. Ain't easy to do. I like the storyline and the ending of this chapter. Thank you for the excellent chapter.
Coyote