BodY foR HirE

This Job feeds me
This gives my everyday needs
This gives lust, desire, passion
                and everything pleasurable.
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These Lips touches so many lives
This Body reaches so many heights
my Life had passed so many challenges
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This Heart is empty all the time
This Soul has been alone all along
my Life was only for me along time ago.

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Author's Note

Edited for error 3.

Reviews

[Gene Hiccup]

hey, your poem's content is a painful truth in some people's life...through
the three last line of your poem:
This Heart is empty all the time
This Soul has been alone all along
my Life is only for me along time ago.
i have felt the hopelessness and misery by people who have this kind of job.

[Sami Khalil]

Three stanzas touching on labor , passion and brokenness that speak volumes of truth on the human condition ( or yours specifically ) but which is universal. We need work to live and continue living utilizing our time and resources greatly , passion to share and release our hidden desires and lastly the effects of it all on the outcomes for some find the pleasure and joy and some end in heartbreaks and brokenness. I like how you give the three options. Brilliant...:)

[Pax]

It's so great to hear your thoughts about this my friend...

there is a saying in our country "kapit sa patalim" which means... hold on to the blade, not sure if that's the correct translation... its simply means do the unimaginable/in-appropriate in your principle just to live, even though in return you'll bleed.

this poem was based or inspired on what i have heard(rumors) over the first few weeks i have been here in Saudi, about how some of our fellow countrywomen strives just being able to live and earned much more for the good of self and family.

thank you so much my friend....

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. Thank you for sharing...Take care friend. Pen on ...Let it out if you like...:)

[Shep]

Another inspirational poem my friend i find wisdom inside of it.

[Belle]

It is good telling here that Labor is life and not the opposite. Some of us forget that we work to live and not we live to work. There is really a big difference between subsistence and having life.

[gabrielle]

i am backtracking your works and i was lured to this because of the controversial title. aww.. truly disappointed..it's not really what i have in mind..kidding.
if we allow ourselves to be enslave by our work or be enslaved with money, would not that equate to prostituting ourselves to a material end? this write present the reality, or at least, a tinge of truth kabayan. very reflective.

[Pax]

your so write kabayan... its just a fraction of truth on what i see... its about the rumors here... I'm sure alam mo to... yung mga (n----(blind item lang to kabayan alam mo na yun segoro)) dito ganun... narinig ko lang yun sa isang kaibigan when i was still new here... the thought shock me... kapit talaga sa patalim pag pinoy ka diba para lang sa pamilya... ganun tayo... gagawin lahat para maka pag padala lang... Salamat kabayan...

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

This really true, in reality it happened. Love this piece. "Engaging lines,passionate,expressive and provocative." Great work.

[Pax]

thank you kabayan... I really appreciate the visit and review :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

The pleasure is mine. Keep writing!

[FJ Davis]

Interesting slant.
And, for the most part, solid content.
Nice work, Will!

[Pax]

you discover my old work. Thanks mr. frank

[Tomislav Petricevic]

I don't know what to say - this is really good! The sad emotions you portray can be perfectly felt throughout the whole poem.
Though the only thing I don't get are those lines behind every stanza. XD

[Clockwork]

I think that it would be interesting to see what this poem could evolve into if you focus in the section about the body. I think if you include specific examples of either things that we do with our bodies after that section, or examples of say professions and how we the people in those professions use their bodies, you could have something really unique.

My favorite stanza is the first one. I think you start with a strong concept and your language is very fluid. I do have to say that I am really fond of the idea of the heart being empty all the time. It makes me wonder why the speaker feels that way. That is also a highlight of the piece.

[Maan]

This is beautiful, precise and very accurately written feelings. :) You can carry on this poem by adding couple of more stanzas but I think you have made justice with it by keeping it to the exact feelings and by not merging it up with the by product of feelings. :) too much of feeling thing.. :D well your poem is wonderful. Very very nicely written. :)

[Pax]

actually its was inspired by rumors here in a Muslim country. that no matter how strict the country is, there is still a way to do something that is forbidden.

[TKBickel]

Simplicity that shouts in volumes.