How far would I go to love you?

 

 

How far would I go to love you?

How many times would I dive and swim in River Bayou.

 

Loving you this way seems isn’t enough for you to stay.

 

I longed for you to give me a chance.

Would you give me a little bit of love in advance?

 

Would my love be enough for you?

Or you’ll disregard me for what I lack,

and leave me in shades of black

   or blue.

 

I know I don’t have everything

For I survive with just little things,

Enough for me to live a life

And even my choices is full of strife.

 

My love is bare because I care,

So much as I breathe your essence like air.

 

I was so tired even though I tried my very best

  - all the awkwardness and mistakes, thinking it was all a test.

 

Sometimes I feel like giving-up,

But resigning wouldn’t do anything to stop

This heart that beats for one person - priority on top.

 

 

 

 

 

Written : 01/28/2014

Updated: 04/21/2014

Author's Note

Photo Credit goes to:
November by birdofdecadence


I was thinking not to published anything, for now I am in a gray period, sad and quite sick but doing quite well despite all that. Still I want to have company in reading your warm review about this piece, or anything, just for me to stay away from the negative emotions I feel.

This piece supposed to be my valentine offering that haven't got a chance to published it on time, just now, it is a fictional piece about love, asking for love and being in love... etc...

Enjoy and thanks for reading.

Reviews

[CoraZanini]

Heartbreaking poem Pax but really good job.
"Would my love be enough for you?
Or you’ll disregard me for what I lack,
and leave me in shades of black
or blue."

I love this line. But sometimes we need to put some battles behind us. Keep me informed:)!

[Pax]

thank you so much, my friend, I am glad you liked it...

[Dhaye]

Hmnn..you kept this for some months? Sad romance...I like the opening line.
Keep writing, bro.

[Pax]

yup, I did, I am not that confident in my writes pretty friend or some of my writes are hidden for the public because it is not ready yet... that is why pending yung iba... I am glad you like this piece and thanks...

[Dhaye]

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Z2Jt8IPZKiM&feature=youtu.be

[Rachelle]

No words, Pax! You know how awkward I feel reviewing emotional stuff so I am just sending you a couple of virtual pets.

http://www.tehcute.com/pics/201112/mama-and-baby-hedgehog-big.jpg

[Pax]

Thank you, that was really cute, Rach... I am glad you felt the feelings behind the piece...

[Zahra]

it is very nice, beautifuly penned romantic piece

[Pax]

My friend, thank you so much... i so appreciate you, always!

[Sami Khalil]

"My love is bare because I care,
So much as I breathe your essence like air.

I was so tired even though I tried my very best
- all the awkwardness and mistakes, thinking it was all a test."

You speak from your core my friend and these thoughts echo your immense deep wells for love and its aspects. From the pain and hurt you try to breathe the essence midst choices and strife.We all lack things but a true lover should not disregard our true feelings for them or our hopes and aspirations to be with them. Excellent and I felt some song quality in some lines. :)............................

[Pax]

it must be the river bayou thing... I heard that from a song, yet i forgot what old song was that... :D thank you very much my good, good friend. What you say are true, I wish everything falls the same way. I am grateful always to you Sami, a good friend & brother... be well & take care.

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure. Any time...:)..........